Black Poetry : HER

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, Apr 30, 2004.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The love I new was like the exceptional few
    That you see once in awhile, only in a crowd
    Of unfamiliar faces, god forsaken places
    Unusual, but fresh! Arguably the best
    No second guessing! Like a bird to its nest
    Comfortable and content, my time well spent
    A soft subtle voice, sweet tempting scents
    Kisses so spell binding keeps my mind bent
    Twisted emotions such a lovely notion
    My princess an I flying, soaring, coasten
    Like doves in the sky, the apple of my eye
    This woman was everything! The filling to my pie
    Filling me up but just a tease, can I get another tasted please!

    Lj
    Unfinished
     
  2. Khasm13

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    hmmm... we are both talking about queens today son...
    tyte piece...please finish it....i was feeling da vibe...
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so cool...
    love the usage of language
    and phrases to show
    just how caught up...
    she is capable of
    causing him to fall...
    maad, crazy...smitten

    Nice flow
     
  4. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnks, Its amazing the state of mind, some people can leave you in!! :hammer:
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This can happen, and does when you least expect it, nice piece.
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight drop
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