Black Poetry : Her Verse Killed Me

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I walked in the dark
    not knowing that the
    red beam was placed on my
    cerebellum (or was it my
    medulla Oblongata?)
    She fired......
    a verse,
    scathing
    dipped in cyanide
    I tried to hide but
    the reader I am
    made me prone to suicide
    so I read.......
    arrow one punctuated with
    an exclamation point
    hit me / killing
    a thought I had
    that i wanted to share
    ...with her....then
    she fired again.........
    I heard the whistling of the
    scribed bomb but instead of
    running for cover...I read
    slowly...the bomb...built
    on nuclear tech(know)logy
    detonated....left my body
    standing but destroyed
    my insides.......I shed a tear
    that was caught by another
    formaldyhyde quill tipped
    scribe.....ended with a period
    that sent me reeling to
    the recesses of my house...
    where light could not reach
    and sight could not see
    I was blinded by...a...antonyms,
    synonyms, homonyms,
    parables, phrases, adjectives,
    adverbs, and verbs...I
    was attacked by my kin...and
    left to die with her verse
    tattooed on my mind.

    (c)2001 blakverb
     
  2. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    wow Blak ... you make me wanna know what verse was this??!
    who is this Poetess that has taken your life with her flow??!!

    does she know??!!

    i'm sure if she did ... she'd be giving you mouth to mouth

    very nice

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  3. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    verb

    left to die with her verse
    tattooed on my mind.

    that ain't a bad way to go you know....or so they say. Loved it brotha absolutely
     
  4. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak~

    Thought provoking piece!

    One.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    MAN

    SHE SLAP SOMETHING ON YA MIND I SEE
    I WONDER WHAT SHE SAID!!?:D
     
  6. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Way too...

    Tight for words...

    Reas
     
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    mm-mm-mm.
    how much deeper can you go, blak?
    i mean, how much more can i take?
    you be comin from a whole other world
    with your thoughts
    and i'm so very thankful...
    *sigh*
    what i'm gonna do witcha?
    -7:spinstar:
     
  8. MoEffective

    MoEffective Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Curiosity Killed The Cat

    But it has made you stronger...

    Truly tight. I was feelin it from the first words.......

    A death in poetic verse is the only death worth dying.
     
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    You wild

    Gi lee man that was a thight concept......... i hope that didn't really happen LOL 1
     
  10. Afridancr

    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    blak

    with each new peace you write, I'm taken to a new level of YOU...

    deeper you are than the deepest of seas...

    ~drowning~
     
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