Black Poetry : Hello Goodbye

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  1. Mikha'el

    Mikha'el Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The first tiime i saw you a smile came to my face

    I said hello, I picked you up and embraced you in my arms

    Such a surreal moment left me in tears

    But it was moments & feelings of bliss like this that got you here

    So happy to finally see you can't wait to take you home

    Still in a zone all my own as we went home

    But soon as i walked through the door my heart sank to the floor

    I saw my living conditions & pondered about how we would live in this house

    For i couldn't take care of myself

    So how am i gonna take care of you?

    I'm in a frantic panic lost for words i don't know what to do

    And this only the first day you home and i gotta do this all alone

    So i'm going through scenarios to see where i can go with this

    Only thing i can come up with is the end all to be all simply end the ****

    As days turn into weeks the situation turns bleek

    You in the front room crying I got no food for you so on the inside i'm dying

    For we both starved and parched and it's killing my heart

    I feel like a failure for not being able to provide

    My thoughts start churning and turning to the other side

    Now i'm on another level as i sit here in tears

    Feeling as if i had no choice but to listen to the voice insdie

    And entertain the Devil's offer

    Satan tells of a way to escape the hell in my life

    So i agree for he's the only one listening to my plea

    So arrives judgement day sorry it has to be this way

    You were my first & the way were parting ways is the worst

    I'd give you the world if i could but i don't feel you should suffer like your mother

    So i'ma free you of worldy pain with this bullet

    I feel so guilty but i feel as if i had to do it

    I couldn't live knowing you weren't being raised as my kid

    I did it for the sake of us both

    As i look at you in your own blood i start to cry & wave goodbye

    Goodbye untill we meet again i love you i promise this won't be the end
     
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    In the Spirit of Sankofa and Truth and Certaincies!




    MiKe,

    Wow! All I can say is don't give up, MiKe. It was this sentence that struck me:

    Only thing i can come up with is the end all to be all simply end the ****

     
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    You were a great storyteller in this. Good imagery and deep emotion in it.


    But I can't help but be saddened, sickened and angry when I see this poem come to life.
    Too many times, we've seen the news reported of someone killing his children and their mother. :whip:

    And sometimes, himself too.

    But you presented this concept very well.
     
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    awesome piece of work as you display it in a fashion ........
     
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    Mikha'el Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks y'all ^_^
     
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    In the Spirit of Sankofa and Truth!


    You are very welcome LQQN

     
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    All I can say is keeppraying and holding on brother.

    It iis so sad the things that happen in this world. We gotta make it a better place


    PEACE BRO
     
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    Thanks =]

    Note - This is not based on a realife experience....Funny thing is i got the concept from listening to a lupe fiasco song Lol
     
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