Black Poetry : ...Hellish Screams...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    2000:

    you killed me
    revealed me
    inside i
    cried endlessly
    you crushed me
    so much see
    inside i
    cried endlessly
    i'm loathing
    you next to me
    inside i
    cried endlessly
    you beat me
    so mentally
    so still i
    cry endlessly
    you scarred me
    bruising me
    inside i
    cried endlessly
    you whipped me
    tongue lashing
    inside i
    cry can't you see?
    you ask me
    why i leave
    inside i
    am screaming
    can't you see?
    what you did to me
    inside i'm
    crying endlessly......


    2003:

    i'm standing
    and i see
    you lying
    in front of me
    your life ending
    not dear to me
    time is pending
    and now i see
    you dying
    right in front of me
    should be grieving
    and feeling sorry
    but i can't be
    cuz of what you did to me
    so i wish you
    a fair journey
    burn in hellish screams
    for what you did to me.....
    and i'll be singing
    when i tell this story.....
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow lovely
    this was a heavy piece
    much love to you sister
    Peace
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep piece lovley
    the whole ride
    wow...posed
    well...
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    too deep the depth was a wall banger !!
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa Lovely, this is for real. I feel u cuz I wrote somethin similar a few months back. big ups.
     
  6. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved the rhythm in this piece...
    nice flow1
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everybody for ya comments....its just something i needed to write about....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome Queen u was well felt too
     
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    whoa:eek: this was very deep
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank rich and swtt:)
     
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