Black Poetry : Heaven

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  1. BrothaAdinkra

    BrothaAdinkra Active Member MEMBER

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    I read this one on poetry night a few months ago.....but this is my first time ever posting any of my poetry...its called heaven...let me know what y'all think...this was the first poem I wrote after a 2 year writer's block...



    HEAVEN


    My heard just died and went to your heaven…
    And there, it floats on the wings
    Of your thoughts of me,
    Trying to make the fantasy of we
    A reality…
    Because when I’m around you, see,
    I feel like a tribe looking up to
    A black queen.
    I want my feelings of love for you
    To be a hobby and a full-time job too,
    Cuz with you, being unemployed just
    Won’t do.
    I wouldn’t know how to act.
    I want to love you with every piece
    Of soul that I have and lack
    Because after you see that, I hope
    And pray you’ll love me back,
    Then we’ll really be on track.
    I want to love you until the Messiah comes back down.
    My psychic said my lifelines
    Aren’t that long,
    So I’ll love you until 6ft underground
    I want to keep you within
    6ft. of my sound,
    so I can tell you about these
    new love feelings I’ve found…
    and after you’ve heard,
    maybe you’ll stick around.
    I want us to dream about each other
    So that in the morning we can
    Discuss it over breakfast,
    Then go take a nap to see
    What life has in store for us next
    I want you to have a long day
    At work so that when you get home,
    I can rub your feet.
    Then you can lay on my chest
    And fall asleep…just so
    Our hearts can meet.
    I want to die so I can go
    To your heaven and get my heart…
    Fall in love with you all over again,
    And never depart.
    Nothing can keep our thoughts apart…
    Well at least that’s the view fro my heart…
    But you don’t even know me…

    ---Tangible Wurdz
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Heavens gate & knowning
    i love this piece and i bet it was tyte reading
    love to hear this one spoken.
     
  3. BrothaAdinkra

    BrothaAdinkra Active Member MEMBER

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    thank you @ rich...means a lot brotha
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome and likewise .....flow some mo !
     
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    BrothaAdinkra Active Member MEMBER

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    I surely will!!
     
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    This was deep
    I see the poems are getting
    Very spirtual
    Starting to send a message
    Loved the piece poet
     
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    mochablaze Active Member MEMBER

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    I'm speechless. I really enjoyed this piece. I can't wait to read more form you.
     
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    BrothaAdinkra Active Member MEMBER

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    awww...thanks you guys ;)
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!!!
    That was so beautiful!
     
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