Black Poetry : Heartbroken

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  1. howardtsu

    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what's the deal with long conversations

    to my consternation

    i'm never able to have them with girls i like

    no matter how far i hike

    to find the right verbs and nouns

    to astound

    the soulmate i found

    one day when i was walking around

    now i'm "On Deadly Ground"

    trying to find a way to make a sound

    that can be heard by her in her town

    i know she can't hear me, so i'm usually down

    and out

    of my mind with jealousy about

    other guys who i know shout

    to her on a daily basis

    while i exist in stasis

    unable to have any impact

    that could attract

    her to my soul

    i'll probably grow old

    never seeing her again

    knowing that some other guy gets to win

    her heart

    all i get to do is use the art

    of rhyming to keep from falling apart

    but it's not enough to ease my mind

    i'm just too far behind

    in the game



    love,

    howard
     
  2. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed this for many reasons...

    It reminded me of a time in my life, when at a lose for words around
    someone I really liked. How I felt awful when I saw other girls able to speak with him effortlessly.

    the rhyme... its something I can't do, but enjoy.

    and writing does comfort some

    there is someone special out there and the words will come naturally in time

    nice write poet


    Coco
     
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    what a well written poem keep the flo's coming howard.:hearts1: :hearts1: :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome flow down to da core
     
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    this flow was perfection in itself...

    Loved it


    Word From MzSoulll
     
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    Powerful drop poet
    Sometimes you can do your best
    Still not manage love
    Nice piece poet
     
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    Nice flow.
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