Black Poetry : Heart Attack

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  1. guttapoetfromny

    guttapoetfromny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HEART ATTACK

    I feel your chest with the palm of my hand
    as it beats with fear,
    I give your head my shoulder to cry on
    As your eyes drip tears,
    your knees knock
    and your lips quiver,
    I hold you tightly to control your body shiver,
    afraid to ask why,
    how,
    what,
    Makes your eyes widen so largely
    your lips hang so lowly
    and your heart beat so rapidly,
    With no questions asked you answered
    afraid of Love.
     
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    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: Oh this is beautifull...







    love the short but clear scrybe..








    Lovelibertylady:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, I didn't see that ending coming poet, it hit me right between the eyes. This was tight!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautiful ending to what we all at some point afraid of
    flow head on
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love this twist of an ending - you make your point so so well.
     
  6. guttapoetfromny

    guttapoetfromny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the compliments

    :hearts2: glad to see that you guys like it this peace is writtin from my own personal experience!
     
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