Black Poetry : He

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  1. karma55

    karma55 Active Member MEMBER

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    I find myself wanting more
    of him,
    Than I need,
    less of him
    Than I love
    all of him
    When I have
    none of him,
    Now,
    I vibrate to rhythms
    when only he knows melody
    To much space in between us
    to space out my thoughts enough
    In attempt to not think of
    what it is that I think of
    every second of every second
    See, I find myself thinking
    more good things
    than i do bad things
    and i want all those things to come true
     
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    karma55 Active Member MEMBER

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    OK, family in an attempt to save myself from shear boredom on a ship i will probaly be posting little fresh sit down and type poems more often. thank you for your ear.
     
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    First, he must be a baaaad man! lol

    Second, "You got it. You got it bad!" lol


    j/k But, this was sho nuff lyrical! I like your language in this and the inverted parallelism.


    Good one!
     
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    sometime i feel this way on her ......i feel ya here been on this very road