Black Poetry : He Told Her

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  1. choclatefantasy

    choclatefantasy Member MEMBER

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    He told her he loved her
    and would always be there
    That nothing could change that
    and he would always care
    He told her that no one
    could ever take her place
    That his love was too strong
    and could never be erased
    He told her that the thing that bothered him the most
    is that she didn't trust in everything he said
    So he decided to show her
    more love instead
    He told her he loved her
    and said do you love me too
    Her eyes filled w/ tears
    as she said I love you
    He softly kissed her lips
    and rubbed through her head
    He gently placed her body
    on the bed
    He undressed her slowly
    and kissed her from toe to head
    He made her feel special
    just like he said
    Before he entered her
    he told her he loved her one more time
    She told him she love him too
    and that she would be fine
    He entered her slowly
    and kissed her when she moaned
    They made "love"
    the whole night long
    They began to make "love" so often
    it was scary
    But it was fine
    b/c one day they would be married
    Soon he began
    having different plans
    He started acting strange
    like he wasn't her man
    She asked him about it
    and he said it was nothing
    The only time he was interested
    Was if they were *******\
    She was upset
    but what could she do
    She was bound by those three words
    I love you
    He eventually slipped away
    and left her full of pain
    He left a hole in her heart
    for the rest of her days
    Now all she can say is
    "He told me he loved me
    and was here to stay
    I gave him my virginity
    and he went away."
     
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    welcome to destee.com poetic flow
    welcome to the family of respect and bond
    welcome to within to share and give love

    this was awesome tyte
     
  3. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice poem. It's sad how powerful those 3 words are and how people misuse them.
     
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    This should be a must read for those who feel they are ready to give themselves totally. Your word usage drew the reader in to those tender moments that should have been real, and then the pain caused by paradise lost. Welcome poet, such a well written piece.
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very sad words to hear, but i hope you grow stronger from these trials. Eventhough he might have taken your virginity remember you still have your heart and that is what truly make you a woman. Keep yo head up gyrl!!!
     
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    That's very very deep and all too true. Truth is better spectated than dictated, I always say. ::sighs:: Men. :bam:
     
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    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow this was really powerfull. It flowed thru the WHOLE poem, and i was really into it. it was very engaging. Whats so much more engaging is the message and point of this. Its amazing the **** some females go thru, even some males go thru, because they love sum1 or think the person loves them. Very well written. a 9 out of 10 :slobber:

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  8. choclatefantasy

    choclatefantasy Member MEMBER

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    Thanx to everyone for the positive response to this poem. The funny thing about it is I wrote this poem b4 this even happened to me 4 real.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a great piece.....this happens too often to girls:(
     
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    Auroraflower Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hazy eyes....





    swollow...








    i hear ya sis.......













    Loveauroraflower:heart:


    Loveauroraflower:heart:
     
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