Black Poetry : He said, She said

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  1. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He said You're pretty, so
    She said if you say so and blushed, then
    He said Why? don't you think your beautiful
    She said not to someone like you
    He said who is someone like me
    She said in whisper eyes downcast someone sexy
    He said I find you very sexy
    She said uh huh, right with a little snort
    He said well what is not sexy about you?
    She said eyes wide with disbelief and a frown
    Do you not see how fat I am?
    He said somewhere between anguish and frustration
    NO, I see a beautiful healthy young woman! then..
    He said why do you think you must conform to
    European beauty when you are a Nubian Goddess?
    She said somewhat taken aback, well I never thought about that
    He said at a size 16 girl you are so stacked
    She said what are you talking about I have no curves
    He said here, let me show you
    She said Oh please while rolling her eyes
    He said while stepping up behind her
    See how your behind molds to my groin
    She said but i don't have a 'butt' it not potruding and round
    He said YES you do while grabbing and pulling her waist tighter
    She said that's nothing but blubber
    He said only whales have blubber and ur hardly a whale
    She said feel this and he proceeded to freely roam her body
    He said come with me I want to show you something
    She said what? he had her standing in the mirror
    He said your body, and proceed to strip off her clothing
    She said STOP looking as she tried modestly to cover up
    He said NO I want to see every inch of your beautiful body
    She said please, it came out more as a plea than a command
    So close to tears she didn't know what to do
    He said Baby, look at me, do you trust me?
    She said Yes as she looked deeply into his eyes
    He said good and proceed to unclasp her hands from her body
    taking it one step at a time, kissing skin as it was revealed
    She said Oh my god as her eyes rolled back in her head
    He said see you finally relaxed no let's learn your body together
    She said ummm I don't know trying to cover up again
    He said NO! forcing her arms to her sides,
    staring intensly at her through the mirror
    She said Okay I can do this after seeing the fire in his eye
    And they did for hours on in, learning each others every curve and line
    No nook nor cranny was safe from exploration
    Until the candles burned out and daylight broke...


    This was a real simple but highly personal piece. Ever since I was young I was always the biggest and tallest girl in my classes. So from all the teasing as I became a young woman I despised my body even though nothing was wrong with it. Until I met the guy I am with now and he forced me to look at myself nude in a full length mirror I couldn't see my own beauty, partly because I had never looked.
     
  2. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    choclatangel:
    I really liked this piece. I believe we as women
    should never get caught up in what society and
    TV thinks or feels we should be. I'm not a size
    6 either I dont have any desire to be. I so luv me and my
    body. I glad you finally see your "BEAUTY".

    Much Luv
     
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    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the comment 4ever, yes, we as women do need to realize our self-worth and not to judge ourselves by tv standards and magazines. We need to look at our mothers, sisters, aunts and cousin, that's where the tru beauty is.
     
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    i loved your strength

    but i don't think your title does your piece justice

    this piece is so powerful it's show how confused we are,
    because we follow someone else's definition of beauty

    i'm glad you met this brotha to show you that you are beautiful

    i mean let's be real afterall you are


    choclatangel

    peace

    you might have been the tallest and biggest and you were probably the best too.

    no holds barred poet
     
  5. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love sol'jah. You're right the title could be stronger. I didn't expect this to come out this way, I started with the title and I wanted to take the poem one place and the words went the opposite way, so it ended up somewhere in the middle.
     
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    Feeling rhis down in my toes

    Love this drop I reread it a couple of times just because it spoke to me. I'm currently learning to love every inch of me through the help of a very good friend. Daily I try to live up to what he sees in me. It makes me a better person.
     
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