Black Poetry : He Loves Me!

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  1. Earftones

    Earftones Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He told me he loved me yesterday
    with whispers of Hypnotic
    and baby Im sorrys
    and Ill never do it agains
    He told me he loved me yesterday with a rush
    of energy
    that sent me
    reeling
    into a wall
    I have never felt so much passion
    or pain
    He told me he loved me
    days before that
    He felt the need to hold me
    tightly
    I thought I would never breathe again
    And as he loosed his hands from around my neck
    He told me he loved me
    with whispers of Alize and
    baby Im sorrys and
    Ill never do it agains
    He shows me he loves me
    the way he holds me close
    when we're out
    never lets me look at anyone
    He wants me all to himself
    He shows me he loves me
    when we are locked in the house
    together
    and I dont see my family and friends
    you see
    he wants me all to himself
    He only wants the best for me
    he corrects my dress
    tells me to loose weight
    corrects my grammer
    tells me nobody else wants me
    but him
    Thats how my man tells me he loves me
    My man told me he loved me yesterday
    with whispers of Hennesy and
    a world wind of emotion
    that brought me to my knees
    beggin
    for my life
    He told me he loved me yesterday
    with baby Im sorrys
    and Ill never do it agains
    I told my self I loved me today
    and turned around
    and walked away

    peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was well said and through the reflection
     
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    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was very good. Well written and very emotional. really grabbed me lol my nose was bumping the front of the monitor practically. At first i didnt see where u were going with it, and then as it progressed i saw better. The ending was perfect. Good jobl
     
  4. Earftones

    Earftones Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks $$Rich$$
    Although Im thankful this is not my Personal story, It is one that gives me great pain as I know to many sistas, including family members who think pain is love
    Peace
     
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    Earftones Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Iwannabe
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was the bomb!!!! That was a good way to get that point across regarding the domestic violence! :terrific: :terrific:
     
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    Earftones Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Wisdom
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Talk about being "loved" to death, self love can save your life. Your words hit the reader hard poet, well written piece.
     
  9. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed :read: ur poem...loved the style...even read it to my friend...lol

    seriously...this poem blew me away...the content, the flow....woww
    bravo

    keep the flow goin

    Mz.Soull aka prizefighter16 :jump:
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!
    very honest and sincere
    i loved it.
     
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