Black Poetry : He Looks at Me....

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  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He looks at me.....
    and I'm terrified
    I'm holding this little life in my arms
    That I once had in my belly
    But now it's free from my form....
    and unprotected......

    He looks at me....
    And I feel like I could faint
    I can already see all those diapers
    Doctor and hospital bills, late night crying
    Rashes,Diarrhea, Chills, Cholic...
    ...yet, I'm not on my own...

    He looks at me........
    And I feel like I'm looking at his father
    I could almost smile but....
    Then I can see his face when I told him
    Of the child due in August.....
    And then I only saw his back......

    He looks at me......
    And I feel like I could cry
    My parents are down the hall and I wonder..
    I asked them...
    "Will you leave me too?"......
    My mother cried.
    My father held me tight.

    He looks at me....
    I wonder if he knows I'm a bad mother
    I have been in labor for 29 hours....
    been in here for 1 and a half days.
    Holding him for 25 mintutes...
    ..But I don't FEEL anything....

    I do not feel the love.
    I do not feel the joy.
    I don't feel like a teenaged mother...
    That just had a ..............

    boy...


    He looks at me........

    I look at him......

    He looks at me........and smiles.......

    And then......

    I feel it.
     
  2. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Omg!!!!!! This was so.....so beautiful...........
     
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    i enjoyed the writing...
    it was really nice
     
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    Swt-t, this is so "real"......

    I've seen this with my own eyes... (a very close relative)

    it's as if you wrote her story......

    I felt this one, conscious scribe girl....keep it flowing

    you shed light on an a sad but very real and difficult issue...
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Da1..I was going for that effect:)

    Thanks Mz backangel, I 'prricate it :)

    Thanks you Angelic:) it's very sad indedd....I had to watch it myself as well.....:(
     
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    This is touching..birth is a wonderful experience, the love you give to a child is endless.
     
  7. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you sudden passion...it truly is:)
     
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    Angelicsage
    Was correct. You are bringing to the front a real and true issue.

    Love did win over in this case. I'm glad. Mixed feeling all swirling around at that moment. I understand, although I'm a man. That this is real. Thanks for sharing.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you hodee:heart:
     
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    thre is no stronger bond than that between a mother and child. this was beautiful and on some levels i found myself relating. thanks for sharing this.
     
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