Black Poetry : He left us

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  1. MsVeraisblessed

    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (Okay, okay....here is a little sum sum....It's not much :D)​


    As i'm lay'n in my bed without a dime,​
    feelin like joan crawford did bout that hanger.​
    my mind's blaring with anger​
    and at the same time,​
    my heart is sad too.​
    i don't know what to do.​
    nites n days have passed​
    as my stomach is round like a compass​
    still no word and no you.​
    what could i have said that made you leave?​
    curiousity has gotten the best of me.​
    what did i fail to see?​

    well....​
    2 decades, and​
    18 yrs later still no you.​
    but that's okay,​
    the mirror i look at everyday​
    is constantly reminded that he is raised perfectly.​


    (its prolly not a good one but remember i'm not a great writer like most of y'all. So don't laugh at me)​














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    Poet MsVeraisblessed,

    Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.

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    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hi: and thank you.
     
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    Hi, right back at you!

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    felt the emotion of this and the true life
    MsVeraisblessed this piece step off the page surely it was of true heart
    well done
     
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    filled with the anger and frustration of every struggling, single-parent household...that caused the other parent to go...to let go...to walk away from a life you once shared so beautifully. i feel you. your words are raw...cutting deep with emotions...making the reader think.

    THAT'S WHAT WE DO.:)

    now, can i get a second helping?

    the river floweth.
     
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