Black Poetry : ..:He Gave It A Chance:..

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  1. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A city known to wash its young up in its grasp...
    New York...
    there is a man who is strugglin' for some cash....
    who thought>?
    he'll be all alone for tha holiday
    wonderin who to call,whut to say
    where does tha foundation lay???
    you thought...
    that tha world only revolved around you...
    so its axis is named....after you.....sound cool???(sarcastic) :rolleyes:

    ^^^just think about that^^^


    Here he is in his cardboard home....
    no love instilled in him cuz his hearts long gone...
    depressed-stressed from prolly losin' a job....
    so he drank his night away-right way he choosin' to harm...
    himself and his health for a couple of sips...
    he thinkin' back now like when he was kid...
    sittin' in his crib-daddy and mommy on tha couch...
    huggin' and kissin'....he missin' those times...he's livin' to die....
    he starts to cry aloud-passer by's laughin' at him...
    some sit and stare...wonderin' where...
    he came from and how tha hell he ended up here...
    in this little corner clutchin' a corona puffin' on a stoge,but......
    this one guy walks up to him-talks to him...
    throws some change in his hands....he just arranged his plans....
    you see that 65 cents was prolly pocket lent to him...
    but to this man it was a gold mine....he grabbed it like," this is all mine!!"
    but tha stranger said," dont buy liqs with this...
    this is tha last of my savings,you see i'm like you,i got tha same cravings..."
    just then he turned and walked away...
    he found a spot down tha block where he decided to lay...
    grabbed a newspaper -opened it up and looked at tha day...
    see it was Thanksgiving....
    He was thankful for living...
    His old friend from before was finishin' his last pull....
    he got up form his homemade bed and stood full....
    of tha bull his life fed him -forgettin' whut his new friend said...
    he went str8 to tha corner store to get rid of them cents...
    he walked out with a dollar beer....stumblin' and mumblin' some words...
    tryin' ta clear tha path in front of him....a bunch of pigeon birds....
    when tha feathers cleared he looked down and noticed that man...
    who gave him his last change....who re-arranged his plans....
    tha man grinned at him,smiled and put his head back down...
    like he didnt even care that he let him down...
    Yoe see some people round here dont care to glance....
    but this man was happy givin'....He gave it a chance....... :)

    Tha End..........[email protected]

    **now thas whut i call Thanksgivin'.........
    Everybody have a safe holiday and please dont be blind to
    you're blessings....times are hard,YES,but theres soo much beautiful stuff
    around us....if you're with family and friends for tha holiday,tell tha ones closest to you
    that you love 'em.....as for others might be a little more unfortunate than you....
    now i'm gone guys,LurkStyle.....onelove,4real** :yo:
     
  2. NADIA*BINTA

    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    peace to u LURK

    this flow is tight... luving da message u laced this piece with... keep it flowing :)

    nadia*binta
     
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    man this is so creative...
    the message so profound...
    i need to read stuff like this more often
    straight up...a phlem laced shout out to you lurk
    for this piece...word
    peace
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed peace be unto u my brutha LURK
    tyte message flow
     
  5. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ONE LOVE 4 REAL!!
    KHAZ,RICH,AND NADIA.......MUCH LOVE.............
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    scribe on
    as the tell is told
    heart felt
    indeed
    Peace
     
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    This was soo wonderfully beautiful, brother Lurk.

    As I sit in front of my PC, stomach growling, I say thank you 4 feeding my mind, this will also get me thru this day of gluttony while I fast 4 my brothers and sisters who aren't blessed with the small things I take 4 granted.

    Peace be unto U, brother.
     
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    Thanx for checkin this out and giving good feedback bluewater and positive mindset....
    i write for my peoples that rep whut i rep...so if u feelin' me then its all love....1
     
  9. angelicsage

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    Wow...Lurk

    This was incredible...such imagery and such a"Magnificent Message"
    I hope we all hear and give.....giving a chance! for Blessed are they...

    **Applause** **Applause** **Applause** **Applause** **Applause**
     
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    Thanks for reminding us to look at what is unfortunately real. Nicely put.
     
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