Khasm13 : he didn't even get to see the summer set in....

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  1. Khasm13

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    ju ju just finished the last day of school
    thru with 7th grade...next year he figures he will rule
    since most of the 8th graders graduated...
    but thas next year....right now he's elated
    because the days of waking up early and doing homework papers that get graded...
    have faded...
    if only for a lil while
    because at age 12...it's still time to be a child
    act wild, play video games and eat candy by the mile
    even still...mom dukes aint having his clothes stacked up in a pile
    she always told him that a durdy ***** never has any style...
    hiking back to the crib with the volume all the way up on his portable cd player dial
    he cut thru the alleyway...the same as he did evey single school day
    but this day he was unaware that he was being stalked as prey
    by the neighboorhood junkie who was borderline gay...
    because he would do [email protected] near anything for a fix
    take it in da @ss...or suck some dics
    it didn't matter...and on this day when he caught ju ju in the alley
    like a falling china plate...his life was shattered...
    da junkie busted him in the back of the head with a brick
    knocked ju ju unconcious then whipped out his dic
    after he was done he stole his cd player and robbed ju ju for 3 dollars and 47 cent...
    left face down ju ju drowned in a puddle of water mixed with blood
    his physical was only 3 blocks from the crib...
    but now his essence rests above...
     
  2. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow..khasm...i hardly have words. I really liked it a lot, it erupted powerful emotions in me. Excellent

    NapturallyYours
     
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    I think I might be speechless

    I'm captivated by uour tyte storytelling ability. Each line made jump forward towards the next. This was an excellent flo cuz. :welldone:
     
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    Oh my...

    Poor ju ju caught the very short end of the stick:crying:. Sad these things happen to the righteous. Emotionally provoking piece here Khas........flow one mo'
    'gain:spinstar:

    :picture:
     
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    Wow...
    We just can't keep watching our ju ju's die
    and witness our mothers break-down and cry.
    If we don't clean up...and do it right now, ...
    there're be a lot more ju ju's, going down!
    I felt ya vib poet.
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feelin this khasm....sad things man...

    "cause a junkie wont bounce till he hits the ground..."

    poor JuJu...

    how ya been ?
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW!!!!
    EXCELLENT scribe Khasm.
    What a story you told.

    Much Luv
     
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    **** this is good but at the same time funked up! I hate ju ju had to go out like that. If you write a part two to this think about having ju ju's spirit come back like Patrick Swazee off of Ghost and kick that junkies ***! to get some payback for poking him in the booty.
     
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    KHASM I AM IN ABSOLUTE AWE THAT WAS STRONG MY BROTHER STRONG AND SAD INDEED CHILDREN GET ROBBED OF THEIR INNOCENCE ALL THE [email protected] TIME AND I TELL YOU THE THINGS I COULD DO THE THE PREDITORS I TELL YOU THEY NEED TO SUFFER IN AN ETERNAL ABYSS I MYSELF A VICTEM OF ABUSE AND MY LIFE WAS SPARED IT WAS AND SO WAS MY SOUL YOU HAVE REALLY STRUCK A CHORD AND I THANKYOU FOR IT BEING A MOTHER OF THREE YOU HAVE HIGHLIGHTED THE DANGERS LURKING IN OUR OWN COMMUNITIES AND PUT IT ON FRONT STREET THEIR ARE SOME SICK PEOPLE OUT THERE AND I KNOW THIS FOR SURE

    MUCH MUCH LOVE KHASM ALWAYS

    I JUST DON'T UNDERSTAND, CHILDREN DONT, I MEAN THEY ABSOLUTLY DONT ASK TO COME HERE THEY ARE GIFTS FROM GOD WITH AN INNER LIGHT IF YOU ONLY KNEW HOW YOU HAVE TOUCHED ME FOR REAL HMMM I AM TRULY STUCK KHASM TRULY I AM TRULY IN TEARS NOW I AM AT WORK AND IN TEARS
     
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    man i felt every lick and know it all so well
    u really said it in motion wow...................
     
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