Black Poetry : hanging by a string

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    inspired by N2urSoul's title ("Un-Know You")....and the one who did the damage...



    every night,
    every day
    he slid his
    precious love things
    on my tender
    heart strings

    & all in between
    that span of time
    I slipped onto
    his,
    some of the very best
    of mine

    I felt the tug of the love
    growing
    we anticipated the
    stretch~pull of our 'knowing'

    I got lost inside the
    deep/wide loops
    of our
    entangling

    the weight of 'us'
    now precariously
    dangling

    above
    licking flames of passion dancing
    wild when the doors are shut

    &

    extinguishing the taste for
    & hope of
    ever getting one last
    NUggeT

    there are times when I want
    to re-wind
    back to the space
    when he didn't
    own
    my mind....

    but my life would unravel
    down to a solitary thread,
    the single little line

    the way it was before
    he slid his things
    on my heart strings

    and we (be)came

    divine


    a
     
  2. YeshuJah

    YeshuJah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thumbs up!

    this could be a song, sung in the key of love. You do a wonderful job of almost taking the reader by hand on this smooth, silky description, right down to the little play on NUT. Its almost as if you wrote this with the tingles still dripping from your fingers..

    For my mullah? Well written.

    JAH Lives.
     
  3. T

    T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sis

    even when sanity is weighing in the balance ~ you make it feel so good!

    I'm with brotha Yeshujah! both thumbs up!

    T
     
  4. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms. A

    I third it
     
  5. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as the fruits of your labor...

    glides down inner thighs
    as eyes
    and heads
    roll back
    with each roll in the sack
    of this and that

    when the NUggeTs are loosed
    of their innermost holdings.

    "TEN"

    as you know.

    One.
     
  6. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yessss!!

    Alyce so many get into a string of des
    i second ya motion u bring a hellava tone
    to my thoughts ......yess!!!!:heart: :D
     
  7. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    Girl, Girl, Girl

    creativity is a natural ability

    and u exhibit it

    Go Girl!

    pd
     
  8. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    yes yes yes Gurlie ...
    i was hang'n by a string
    wondr'n where you were

    :)

    whew ... now i can breathe again

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  9. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this piece is so devilishly
    delicious...
    i'm savoring....
    thank you.
    -7:spinstar:
     
  10. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sustah A~

    Let the "creative" juices flow... girlfriend!!
    This piece is definitely the "sum of the whole"...! :wink:

    And, I must say -- I'm lovin' it thoroughly...

    Two Thumbs UP sis'

    One :heart:
     
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