Black Poetry : hallelujah...part 1

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  1. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she runs barefooted on these thorny grounds...

    grounds which once fed her
    nurtured her
    shaped her
    groomed her...

    but now these grounds are dry...
    and want to swallow her..
    bury her inside.

    and so she runs.

    she tries to run faster in the stillness of this fateful night but the baby on her back is heavy and tightens her chest so that she slows down and starts to think.

    she thinks of broken promises in the shadow of hope which lit her to fire energy but now the smell of the burnt ashes haunts her everywhere she goes.

    she thinks of passions fuelled with anger and lies and the thoughts she remembers she wishes to forget..and the thoughts she remembers...she wishes to forget.

    she licks her dry lips and tries to taste her infedelity on his salty sweet lips and the the thoughts she remembers-she wishes to forget... she remembers things turning upside down her life turning into a whirpool of justifications and reasons why..why..a why with no answers inthis life time to explain how soulmates can only meet in the darkness of secrecy...

    she thinks and thinks until all communication in her mind reaches a deadlock.

    then she wonders why she bore this bastard child out of wedlock..and she runs.

    part two follows in the woods...
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Part 1 deserves another run... I Like It!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow! pt.ll i'm awaiting u
    dis was very nice flowin
     
  4. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u!!! its good to be back on the flow section...been meditating on this piece for a while....part two go be hitting you in no time....much love and thank u, thank u...

    lo'
     
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    likewise sistah nice to see u scribing wit great motion
     
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    Mkhaya'lo, this was so beautifully scribed, such imagery, mystery with a captivating style...........you really had me anxious to get to the end...........Can't wait for part 2.

    This was a pleasure to read, thank you for submitting this!
     
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    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    angelicsage...i'm ready with part two...

    thank u for your supporting words..

    lo'
     
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