Black Poetry : Guilty

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Amun-Ra, Sep 21, 2001.

  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My elbows stuck to the table providing
    tired support for hands holding my head.
    Red-rimmed eyes peer through splayed fingers
    at her and six full chambers next to the bed.

    Breathing sheets rise subtly and slowly fall,
    random skin flash flexes my fruit of my vine.
    Irregular patterns pull my eye along her spine
    seeing prints that couldn’t possibly be mine.

    It’s only six steps to pearl-gripped relief
    for jealous erection and this rigid pride,
    slumped forward and kneading my scalp,
    it’s swallowed whole and kept inside.

    Glued feet dampen the heart,
    but a fool believes in love’s call,
    knowing any excuse will suffice,
    when understanding meets the wall.

    Imagination fuels the guilty mind
    as a one way ticket with no transfer,
    suffering from phantom reciprocation,
    knowing that it was me and not her.
     
  2. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow..I liked the twist at the end of this piece and the way you turned it around...

    it was like watching a short movie..seeing you sitting there, eyes bloodshot from crying..heart heavy...great imagery..

    K
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wooooweeee!! Ra

    dis be a show case of show time
    as i see the emotional side affects
    lovin dis here:D
     
  4. YeshuJah

    YeshuJah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cuz

    I love the mix, the word flow and the nix. Well wrapped.
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes, i agree, ra...your word flow is incredible. i'm always lovin' it !
     
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    Amun Ra this is.......

    A poetic masterpeice.........

    Epiphany:heart:
     
  7. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gotta Admit When wer're wrong

    Sometimes we blames others for what we do--this was aturnaround case--thanks y'all

    Ra

    ;)
     
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