Black Poetry : GrEeN eYeS

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by serenti-poet, Apr 3, 2004.

  1. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful green eyes
    On a beautiful black man
    Eyes so pretty and quiet
    They look like they don't belong to him
    In them eyes I see tears
    Waiting to spill
    But the person behind them eyes
    Knows better than to let that happen
    Because if them tears decide one day
    To go ahead and spill out
    Everything them green eyes
    Have placed themselves upon
    Might come right on out with them
    Who knows how much ****
    Then green eyes has seen
    More than my brown ones have
    Probably
    My regular old brown ones
    But I ain't complaining
    I look into them green eyes
    With my brown ones
    But only when I have my shades on
    Because them eyes are deadly
    Just like I see into them
    They see into me
    And if them green eyes look too deep
    They might see that I want them
    Not just those eyes
    But the person behind them too
    So I keep my shades on
    And only glance at them green eyes
    From time to time
    Because I can't take the risk
    Of having them green eyes
    Wanting my brown one's back
    Because that would be a crime
    So...
    I just glance at them
    Beautiful green eyes
    On that beautiful black man
    Whose eyes are so pretty and quiet
    They don't look like they belong to him
    And I just wait and wait and wait
    Till they decide to spill
    So I can catch them
    While he looks into my brown eyes

    :thanks: for reading fam
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your vivid description of those green eyes make us feel like we can feel them too. Lovely scribe.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaa!!! green eyez into da brown ones
    dis was well expressed from da core made me see
    into them eyez ....flow on
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa! intense concept, and very well posed, sis. dig it.
     
  5. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think I know this guy. LOL
    Good piece I enjoyed it.
    :spin:
     
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    SkinDeep Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I ENJOYED THIS ALOT.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh this was just so sweet
    i love how you flow this poem
    wow :)
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  8. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Makes me wish my eyes were green....hmmmmm.... :idea: Contacts! lol
    Very nice
    Very nice indeed




    PEACE AND LOVE
    twision
     
  9. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :lol: @ twision LOL
    Sista Serenti so so so SO happy to be reading you again my sista...now come into chat and bless us ALL with this piece hehehe :D
     
  10. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sis, i like this piece
    the expression and er'rythings real tite

    uhh, twision, can i go to tha sto wit you?

    :driveby:

    one,
    /antar
     
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