Black Poetry : Green Cucumber

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  1. rhymebad

    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Green Cucumber

    Like stuff in the small intestines this is all destine to be
    Flush down the drain just a clown too lame to honor me
    Like water this will dissolve your crap need a new job
    Perhaps, ignore this slob, doorknob need a cotton Swab
    Climb mountains and drink from rhyme fountains that
    Gushes from rocks so fresh and pure, bless for sure, phat
    In the minds of many, look thes evenings of summer got
    Me breathing in hummers with the top down it’s really hot
    Feel like a bright star that excite bazaar ladies and kiss a lots
    “Girl you been fine and your coochee enzymes wait for me to
    Penetrate and demonstrate my love to you now do you see boo?
    Now turn your eyes, have firm thighs let me rub, you have a wet
    Love, with true height lets unite let me get your tongue don’t fret
    My mind is greedy we can sign a treaty sweetie which involve
    Love my job is to scrub your back in the tub that’s not odd
    You tender and slender like a marine fish make a clean dish
    Of meat to eat so get your wet sandwich spread gonna do crisp
    Damage in bed gonna have to bandage your head and see the proper
    Doctor because my helicopter tongue will make your juice flow hotter
    And well while I propel and swell up associate and relocate in
    A mobile home be vocal and strong with oral sex, levitate with the wind”
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    got a response on every site but this one
     
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    sky763 Banned MEMBER

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    well

    that should tell you something about those "other" sites
     
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    Perhaps those other sites were more active than this one yesterday... This was playfully spicy, and oozing with rhymes, rhymebad.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    fun creation enjoyed the show
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the props everybody for real
     
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    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    i ain't gonna touch it

    but if u want some real talk...

    move to the critique section.....

    as a woman the vibe of this is cheap and lustful...

    u rap like a ritz (just being honest) .....

    "helicoptor tougue" .. I just don't know any black people that write or talk this way............

    you asked....

    and I'm trying to be real wit ya.. but that title "green cucumber" along with the vibe..... makes me feel like if I mess wit ya imma catch a std..... like green oooz or something.. going to see the doctor... u gotta use ur tongue instead of the sickly d***ly... ?????????

    break it down... like what does this rhyme suppose to mean????

    sometimes u just use so many words that at the end I'm like what the hell he talkin bout.............. and i'm quick on my toes so it ain't that it's over my head......

    and then it seems all ur favorite people .. that u reference in ur rhymes are not black people....
     
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