Black Poetry : Gothic

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, May 20, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she changes her look
    how she feels
    blood red nails
    stiletto heels
    who will she be tonight
    she spots her prey
    who will look just right
    her mind has chosen

    she reveals parts that should be hidden
    transfixes them with what is forbidden
    she finds the one who peaks her fancy
    dark smoldering eyes
    clothes quite fancy
    platinum and bling bling glitter
    the type of thing that makes her laughter echo

    together they walk through the dark rainy street
    street lights watching
    movement of feet
    clicking of heels
    smell of clove smoke
    he thinks he is the winner
    she knows what she wrote

    he will never be seen again
    the blood red nails
    the black guard rails
    the handcuffs the sex
    the screams of pain
    she laughs her titter she speaks his name

    she disposes of his body
    she is not new to this game
    a week goes by and then another
    she becomes restless
    pacing
    the utter relentless need takes over
    she changes her look
    how she feels…
     
  2. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    ooouuuuuuuuuu Redlady !!!!!

    Brothers Beware !!!!

    Love It Sis !

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    MASTERFUL IMAGERY!

    The imagery was masterful you had me right there...
    then you had to go and dispose of the brother!
    oooooooooh! girl do we need a twelve step program?:D
    That was **** good writing , **** good!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
    AND LAWD LET THAT SHE-DEVIL DAT BE INSIDE REST SHE SELF FOR A WHILE..:devil: :devil: :devil: :oops: :oops: UH OH!
     
  4. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this peace had me thinking all sorts of things...

    she sounds like Vampira, Jack the Ripper and a she-cat all rolled into one...guess the end result is still the same though...she is draining the life out of her victims....always on the prowl...

    K
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well now i be .....hot **** !!! running for cover .......nice hot flow
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bravo!!!!

    BE
     
  7. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad that you liked it...the inner seductress...she has her issues.
     
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    monet1027 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reddy, you've done it again, Sis. Keep flowing...............
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes...I'm feeling those "issues" my sista...it's been too long since I've read you...keep that excellent flow coming!

    thank you

    Alyce