Black Poetry : Got Me Smoking Cigarettes

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  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Got me smoking cigarettes
    Up in my bed
    Crying in regret
    Because I let
    You get
    Deep in me....and I bet
    You don't regret
    What you let
    Yourself do to me, I hate you
    Yet there is no limit to the things I let you do
    And put me through
    To pursue
    The love.......the love.......the lust.......the abuse
    We had, plus misuse
    I can't believe I used
    To love you.............

    Cause you got me smoking cigarettes and blunts
    To taunt
    My head with want
    temptation
    and neglection
    of you
    of you
    the man who put me through
    so much that I would want to pursue
    a suicide
    and hide
    from the pain
    and disdain
    you contained
    and maintained
    throughout the four years
    we been together......tears
    Tears that's all you ever brought me....and fear
    Fear of loneliness

    Verbal Abuse, about my weight
    And food entake
    Everybody ain't as bless as you....but you wait
    I'll get down some day and make
    You take
    Back everything you every said....just wait
    Physical Abuse, you thought I was a puching bag
    A little rag
    Of a figure
    And I can't believe I let you....I was so immature
    To let a man as tiny as you attack my virtue
    Oh, how I hate you
    But at the same time I want you
    I want you to take me in your arms
    And harm
    Me again
    And again
    sexually
    What has gotten into me?
    I need a cigarette.......


    Puff one....
    Where is he?
    He's suppose to be with me
    Not with Kee-Kee
    or Ree-Ree
    But me

    Puff Two
    He bettah not come in here saying I love you
    When I know it's all a lie and soon it will mean nothing to few
    Because after poof three.....I'm through

    Puff three....
    He's still not here besides me
    I guess it wasn't meant to be
    Because the cigarette is gone and he's with Kee-Kee
    Or whoever he's with daily
    All I know is it's not me

    Click-Clock-Click
    That's the door being unlocked
    I look at it and I'm stiff like a block
    I'm so shocked
    When he comes in with a ring
    A ring and a thousand words asking me to be his sweet thing
    What's a girl to do?
    Well, I'll take him back this one time
    But I bettah not have to smoke another cigarette.....this is the ONLY time

    I mean it....and this is not just another line
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deeply felt and i hear ya from ya pain & mental stain
    of hurt we learn da hard way but we better from the
    mist of lust and mission to a journey of define pleasure
    at the end hold ya head up high
     
  3. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Rich. I really appreciate it but this was nothing personal. I just made it up.
     
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    Yes lawd!!! I was feelin' this one to the ut-most!! It really reminded me of that old Bille Holiday song....what's it's called...."My Man????" I think that's it but this piece reminded me of it...EXCELLENT SCRIBE!!

    :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping: :jumping:

    :bowl: :bowl: :bowl: :bowl: :bowl: :bowl: :bowl: :bowl: :bowl:
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

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    you laid this one out.....
    felt the words very good write
     
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    Well done, this piece is off the chain...you crafted this very well and crafty...thanks for sharing it.
     
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    awesome flow
    i mean this was awesomeee
    from the beginning to the end
    you had me as a reading
    caught into the feel of your flow
    i was walking those steps with yeah
    almost felt like smoking me a cig..LOL
    nice one poet

    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you just made this up krazylyricks, you're writing is so vivid it would lead one to think you are describing something real. What uncertainty can do to a sista, flow on poetess.
     
  9. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much family. Thanks for always supporting a sistah's work. I really do appreciate it. :D
     
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    it was refreshing to hear you say you just made it up...
    sounds so real though with all that nicotine :lol:


    good read,,
    peace....
     
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