Black Poetry : ...Goodbye...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    male:
    tonite i brought you over here
    to say something so severe
    i don't know how you'll react
    but i have to get this off my back

    female:
    sweetie tell me what's on your mind
    you look so troubled at this time
    is something wrong in your life?
    has someone caused you any strife?

    male:
    no darlin' i'm afraid that's not it
    no one has caused me pain one bit
    but i've had this thought in my mind
    i was wondering if you'd....nevermind

    female:
    i want to know what consumes your thoughts
    did someone you know make you distraught?
    your kind of scaring me right now
    i need to read your mind somehow

    male:
    well...its just that you have been...

    female:
    finish your statement my dear friend

    male:
    you are the one that comsumes my thoughts
    you are the one making my heart drop
    you are the ray of sunshine in my day
    you can relieve all my disarray

    female:
    wow...i'm so [email protected] speechless now
    it took you twenty years to figure this out
    and you know that i WAS in love with you
    but i thought that you wanted nothing to do
    with me or my life or my career at all
    you were just there to capture my fall
    i never thought you loved me at all
    and now you want me to answer loves call

    male:
    well i....

    female:
    stop i can't take this no more
    i need to get up and walk out that door
    how do you expect me to run to you?
    after all it took to get over you?
    and plus you say this while i am married
    how more disrespectful can you be?
    you had your chance to be my man
    you should have taken on that chance
    i'm sorry if you go home feeling so sad
    but i need to get home to be with my man

    male:
    wait i....

    female:
    stay silent, goodbye...
     
  2. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hmmm very interesting... I like this...
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks poetically....this happened to me yesterday...just wanted to write about it...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the emotions felt in this was very real
    and the goodbye 's of something old
    wow! u capture a picture as i vision it
    on hit !
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks rich:)....
     
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    most welcome sistah

    u have the golden heart
    and warm soul
    thank u for u sistah :)
     
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    This was deep.......
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

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    awwwwwww rich ur so sweet:)
    thanks da1whownslife
     
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    very deep piece. i like it.
     
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    deep ...
    i like it
     
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