Black Poetry : Goodby

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by shaz, Nov 13, 2002.

  1. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You and your family were the only people in the world that could just show up at my door unannounced and be welcomed
    Every body else got the deaf and dumb treatment
    To be honest my brother, I am a little pissed
    I get mad every time I look in your 3 year old sons face because he looks exactly like the father he will barely remember
    I get mad every time I think about the fact that you lost your skills on the racquetball court because you were working to hard play every once in a while
    I get mad that you did not take the time to smell the roses and feel the summers breeze
    I get mad every time I see your wife in that brand new Mercedes Benz that she bought with your life insurance policy
    I get mad because I remember that when you went to buy a Mercedes Benz for yourself she went down to the bank and tested you manhood
    I get mad because I know that you worked yourself to death
    I get mad because you should be here and you are not
    I get mad because you left to soon and without telling me
    I have been mad for almost three years now
    but life goes on and I suppose I should two
    Man I still miss you but this is goodbye
    I will see you when I see you
     
  2. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    shazzy.


    ...this line:
    "I get mad because you left to soon and without telling me"
    i felt all too deep-ly, my dear.

    thank you for the message... & for letting my
    words encourage you. remember what i said!!

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
  3. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for everything
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed even without a word no goodbye's
    now ya movin span has took u into a new zone
    so see ya when i see ya !!!
     
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    your ending suggests you have finally let go and accepted...this is a good thing....because now you can remember him for all the wonderful things he was while he lived....I can relate to the way you feel..but there are just some things we just can't change, no matter how much we wish for it to be so...


    K
     
  6. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for your insight
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, I felt your anger, your sadness and your resolve in this poem. Thank you for putting it out there.
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for your read
     
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    I read it.....Resolution is good
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lawd

    You and Elayne are destined to make me face some losses I dont think im quite ready for... therapy in poetry.

    Thanks Bruh
    Reas
     
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