Black Poetry : Gonna need help with a title :)

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My deceased heart laid on the back of a pheonix
    As it burned to ash only to be born again
    A revival
    Like born again Christians worshipping golden idols
    Oxymoronic phrases placed love and us on the same page
    But rather than fade, it grew with every lol and smiley face
    My skipped behind Superman over the white sands to his left hand
    Call it wearing my heart on his sleeve
    Unbeknownst to all but God
    Our love blossomed in late night messages and silent phone conversations about nothing
    Like dancing with stars in outer space, its out of place
    Yet managed to fit perfectly like they were never seperate
    Tireless smiles, listening to dial tones
    Laughing at jokes unspoken, we heard it though
    Experienced turbulence but we survived due to the fact that he beileved he can fly
    Blissful from the rhymes of speechless love
    Permeanting the air through words capitolized upon by warm embraces
    For the distance couldn't dilute the lengths of time
    After I'm seated on the right hand of God I'll send my heart through time machines
    Travel through the various galaxies and space continums
    To once again be a part of his ananomy because my heart is his
    I managed to find the strength to withold the passionate tears
    For when my love spills over and floods, it causes tsunami sized waves
    But while our love is restricted, it's far from insignificant
    Little is expected yet much is given and we're just beginning
    When the two halves meet it'll form a bond stronger than concrete
    Let it be written in stone and withstand forever times two
    Since the time permitted is hardly enough for the mutiple turns of phrase
    The nonsense questions with sensible answers, the journeys of minds and verbal intercourse
    As he contorts my mind into impossible positions streching the limits
    Until an explosion escapes my lips in the form of innocent laughter
    It simple works for we are kindred spirts one and the same
    Our name written in the stars, love preordained
    Destined forever to be him and me, us, and we
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt all of this like reading my very own soul, i saw a title within this deep flow of expression

    (MY Heart Through Tyme)
    (His unchange hand holds my Heart)
    these two titles, i felt reading this piece
     
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    great poem. im speechless.sometimes works of art speak for themselves and need no title.
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the help $$RICH$$ much love

    maybe you're right. i might have to keep this one untitled. much love
     
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    NAW NAW THE TITLE THE THIS IS (LOST IN MY DREAMS)

    how can you go from a deceased heart burned to ashes

    to christians born again worshipping idols---that within itself can't be christian are not allowed to worship idols

    then this piece right here went into a love story
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, JDN...what a spectacular write here....

    I like these soul deep flows you be comin up with....

    your a lady who thinks outside the box.

    n i c e.


    How about :spinstar:Cosmic Web:spinstar:, for a title? Cosmic, for the galaxy you mention and web to symbolize the web the lovers are in, and them meeting on the web ( the internet)
     
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    wow i like all these titles
     
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    DEEP JDN DEEP

    i was thinking call it "DESTINY"

    but what do i know?:SuN013::hammer::skate::em2700::idea:
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol i'm sure you know a lot more than i do thanks for the help :qqb023:

    actually i like that one apple*pie
    thanks for the love

    the born again christians worshipping idols was meant to be as unlikely as us falling in love, get it?
    this one was kind of strange in the beginning because you have to know the story about how me and him met to understand some of the lines
    but the message is still there regardless right?
    thanks for the title and your input :qqb023:
     
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    i won't attempt a title...

    ...however, i'm forever intrigued by the concept of FOREVER LOVE and the many ways we see reincarnated perceptions of our love...through all the good we can think of. THAT'S LOVE.

    NICE.
     
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