Black Poetry : ....Go on Faith

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ....Go on Faith ​

    Scorched sand sizzled hot with a blister.
    Rising heat sucked the air out the day.
    And the motionless sun like an unblinking eye
    poked bones and my brains in its way.
    I buckled on my knees from exhaustion
    then my face hit the sand full flat.
    Without water, each breath was a dry pain hurtin'
    and my blood thickened more from its lack.

    A pump handle shimmered in the day's heat
    and I focused, crawling to it 'cross the land.
    Hanging there was a sign, "Go North five feet.
    Dig for water in a box in the sand."
    Scratching eyes searched frantic for its pinpoint.
    Charred fingers clawed the sand going deep.
    As I dug with a frenzy then I felt something hard.
    Had I liquid for some tears, I would weep.

    In the box, I found a bottle full of water.
    "Don't Drink" said the jug's top sign.
    "Pour half, prime the pump then wait five.
    When the other half's in, pump nine."
    I blistered in my madness for the water.
    Five minutes more of thirst was too great.
    I twisted off the lid and I tilted up the jug
    but those words "Don't Drink" made me wait.

    After nine pumps, I fell against the handle.
    Liquid sputtered then it spurted from the spout.
    I was drenched and wallowed, bathed and swallowed
    in water, sweet in words I rued to doubt.
    And on the bottom of the bottle was a clear sign,
    "Fill this bottle for the box, please do,
    for the next soul searching for a Life raft
    who may have to go on Faith like you !"

    HH
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow ! .....HH this was off the chain man
    when u come u bring it to perfection......
     
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    Hi Harry
    bravo !!!! there are times in our lives
    when we have to go on pure faith
    and nothing else. I really enjoyed
    the poetic story you unfolded
    to bring to life that fact:)

    Peace
     
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    Quite a lesson in poetic verse you have flowed, in that potent descriptive style that puts your reader squarely in that moment. This was so wonderful brotha...wow.
     
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    i really enjoyed this flow flow on my brother.:hearts1:
     
  6. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich - "Off the chain" is an apt definition and I thank you for it. HH

    Bluewater- Your perception is on target. Thanks, HH

    Watz - If you got a little thirsty, then you were squarely in that moment. Thanks, Watz, HH

    Nevar - Your enjoyment is an honored compliment. HH
     
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    u always have the tyte stories poet...
    good ish...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    This is excellent in the words of the Almighty God if you believe in me; I shall give you the knowledge of my son Jesus, and through this mist of horror, the light began to shine, he shall never leave you, he shall walk you through hell, faith in the almighty shall bring miracles; the development of your voice, speaks the wisdom of Gods love; their is no doubt who he is, through times of struggle he shall always be there, again this is excellent, the impact was a voice of achievement, and the atmosphere brings hope, this is written with great quality.
     
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