Black Poetry : "girl on the side (reality check) "

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by j'hiah, Aug 26, 2004.

  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    .... can't love u
    can't trust you...
    l care
    l lust you
    body bare... l'm drawn
    bedrooms eyes.. pretty hair
    wouldn't dare commit
    my will is split...
    you see God in me
    but He's now out of view
    when it should be you
    when it should be you
    each time saying "l'm through"
    at the expense of our friendship
    we're human
    we slip...l'm praying to God but my
    mind's not ready for the grip
    but my heart is ready to end the strife
    at any expense... including you
    and that's on life,,

    after you cried
    leaving my ride
    peace inside..

    girl on the side
     
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    oh wow...
    you are really
    "flexing" those
    poetic biceps...

    I am in awe...
    the first piece embodied such passion
    and then this one...
    with so much reflection
    and consciousness...

    I'm officially impressed...
    but I would expect no less
    from someone extrodinary enough
    to be my poetic reflection :wink:

    Allow me... :bowdown:
     
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    Yes, we're human, we err, but we are capable of learning from our mistakes. I like your flow poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man u laid this one out indeed we refine self from all mistakes made
    tyte drop
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    J'hiah

    This peace is heartfelt, bruh...because I can feel your desire for her but knowing that you must let it go because the risk is too great...and payup time is drawing near.

    :thanks: for being true with your thoughts...dapz.

    :toast:
     
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    Mmmmm a conflict soul deep indeed my brotha
    I felt every line strikingly real
    *sigh*
    I do hope you find the peace of mind you seek...
    matters of the heart are NOT to be tampered with ya know *sigh*
    find ya serenity my brotha
    :grouphug: :heart: :grouphug:
     
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    Wow. In the end it is about self-preservation. You have to save yourself. Right is right. Love your flow
     
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    tru indeed God tru indeed God
    what?
    tru indeed God tru indeed God
    what?
    tru indeed God TRU INDEED...

    speak on it....
    one love
    khasm
     
  9. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    madd love to all poetz...

    this is some "waybakwhen".
    l'm serving a real-life situation- that's all-
    not l, says the dunn.

    peace.
     
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    What a rousing rendition of a girl, not center to be in your life. Side lines can be exciting, but mind over matter. Can't be controlled by the thing. We swing. You did right. ( did I say that? ) :oops: :laugh:ing

    " .... can't love u
    can't trust you...
    l care
    l lust you
    body bare... l'm drawn
    bedrooms eyes.. pretty hair
    wouldn't dare commit
    my will is split... "

    I enjoyed this flow.
     
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