Black Poetry : Gift of Good Bye

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  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    he wasn’t much on talking
    nor the type to say goodbye
    he’d just hang up the phone
    and let the dial tone ride
    not out of disrespect
    or to insinuate a fight
    but usually he didn’t care enough
    to try to be polite

    along came a yin
    to his ice cold yang
    a baby doll face-ded
    grown woman waist-ed
    politely abrasive valentines thang

    this love child went against the grain
    and rubbed him the right way
    with soft spoken lip service
    compliments of her gloss and kiss game

    he felt kinda lame
    despite being gangsta at heart
    it was the subtle geisha undertone
    of her fine woman art
    that seduced his resolve
    rendering him subliminally enthralled
    and open to being involved and entertained

    if it was game
    then her poker face came from the queen of spades
    he still cared enough to risk calling her bluff
    he was willing to a gamble with his heart
    and even liquidate his player card
    if she cashed in the chip on her shoulder
    they both had to ante up

    the stakes were high
    she cultivated his random deposits
    turning seeds of secrecy
    into more and more intimate knowledge
    of his roots
    which blossomed into branches
    baring low hanging fruit
    resembling skeletons hidden in the closet

    she could tell by his actions he was invested now
    security and her stock price had risen
    the going rate on the market
    wasn’t what either of them bargained
    so they both got off and pursued something different

    he still wasn’t an open book
    his hand was a sanctum of not to mentions
    but she loved him in between silent lines
    of communication
    even cared enough to pay his details attention
    noticing he said good bye
    for the very first time
    was a gift she wouldn’t soon be forgetting

    … hopefully he’d say it again tomorrow

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    Haaaaaaaay NittyGrit ... Welcome Home ... :wave: ... great story ... uhhhh ... i mean ... poetry ... :)

    Beautiful Write! Thanks for Sharing!

    Your web site is real nice too ... thanks for sharing it all with us!

    Much Love and Peace.

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    butta smooth this like a page out somebody story line .....great write bruh
     
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    Love it..Thanks for posting.
     
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    This really is a gift, NittyGrit.

    Verbs in a high rise act ~

    most enjoyable
     
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    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for your kind words Destee. It's refreshing to be back among my peers and creative family.
     
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    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    1poetsought thanks for checking out the poem. Feedback from a fellow poet whose penmanship is a ferocious as your's is encouraging. Atlanta is in here!
     
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    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dunwiddat thank you for reading the poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to checking out your work.
     
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    Rich aka Mr. Chi Town, as always I appreciate the feedback. Thank you for checking out the poem.
     
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    Brother Poet NittyGrit,
    Good to read you, again.

    Love the line, "but she loved him in between the silent lines"

    I love the way this piece progresses, allowing the subject to build to the point where he finally says good bye without any proding from her. Nice read.Thanks for sharing.

    (smile)
     
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