Black Poetry : Get Ova It..

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Antar, Apr 7, 2004.

  1. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can i make a promise?
    to relieve me of you.
    believin in you...
    place you close to me
    interlace your space within
    your inside place to mine
    come closer
    combine
    rename DNA structure
    to watch the solution rupture
    burst spilling my time and presence
    presented as never fulfilling
    chilling deceptiveness
    your feelings to chop me down
    below your person
    ensure your superiority
    makes me something to step over,
    keep your nose tilted highly '
    what happened with you
    pictured you praying for me to the
    Almighty
    no one to blame-just life
    to seperate obliterate
    leave stranded
    to think i accepted your idea
    makes these things i'm feeling
    feel false
    why would you work to put me off?
    now i feel
    alone am i soft
    with you , not enstrengthened
    hold me tender while i send you love to remember...
    why not
    my temperment is white hot
    the mystic duality i face
    is it me, GOD?
    please say it to my face
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    this was deep brotha...
    i feel the need to read this again...tyte scribe
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Some situations leave us with nothing to do but move on. Feelin this scribe.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was well felt , we all have to move on in some case
    this flow lay on my mind here keep it coming
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    felt this one
    really nice read...thanks for sharing
    peace
    Blkangel
     
  6. angelicsage

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    yeah...this was deep
    I heard a lot of soul reflection
    and questions of loyalty, love
    and deception...Brother...
    this was stirring...
    a mosaic of soul confessions...

    Tyte scribe
     
  7. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Confessions hmmm I like this make me go listen to Usher :roll:
     
  8. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa, now this really takes ya inside the depths of thought. really diggin this scribe.
     
  9. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everybody
    i can't put words together
    how much ya'll feedback mean rite now
    thanks

    one
    /antar
     
  10. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This one has undeniable motion and depth.
    This one was posed very well!
    It deserves to be back at the top!



    PEACE AND LOVE
    twison