Black Poetry : Gangsta B*tch Blues (to the tune of Deeper by Boss)

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  1. Legacy21

    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The record played:

    I don’t really wanna feel………

    I don’t want to remember the first time I heard the gunblasts
    The stench of sulfur
    Eyes glazing over with death
    Don’t want to remember the rainbow arch of blood
    Decorating the night air
    As bodies hit the pavement with a deadly thud
    The gurgling of trapped air and red rivers in throats
    Don’t want to remember the screams and curses
    Don’t want to remember the cool feel of steel beneath my fingers
    I couldn’t be her
    Couldn’t be her
    That beat flesh until it split like overripened fruit
    That shivered with an intense evil satisfaction
    As you cried for surrender beneath the stomping of combat boots
    Couldn’t be me as I turned away from the screams of an innocent
    14 year old little girl
    Being raped by my boys
    As I sat in the next room blazing blunts
    Don’t want to remember the look in her eyes
    As she lay so still covered in blood and demon seed
    No, no it wasn’t me that watched a grown man plead for his life
    As he was tortured
    Cut, burnt, and beaten
    Left in a garbage pile heap at his friends feet after 3 days of brutality
    Wasn’t me that stared you coldly in the face as you screamed
    I told you, ***** you deserve it….
    Wasn’t me that wrapped my thighs around wide backs
    Night after night trying to fill the void inside
    Silently suffocating
    Suffering from insanity
    Drowning sorrows in broken bottles of gin
    Puffing the pain away in cannabis clouds
    Ready to kiss death
    The words whispered
    In the darkness
    Take my soul
    I don’t want to remember the monster I was
    Don’t want to remember the terror and tribulation
    No, no it wasn’t me
    It wasn’t me
    Wasn’t me….wasn’t me….wasn’t me….wasn’t me….

    & the record played……

    “I don’t really wanna feel…..”


    Does God forgive a ***** like me?


    *click, click, click...... BOOM!!!!!!!*

    & the record played:

    "I don't really wanna feel...."

    NO MORE
     
  2. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was deep...****...you know I've seen that story in so many sisters eyes it's scary...I applaud you for this magnificent poetic story.

    bless.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ****!!
    i too seen this many many times before me
    i seep deep within ya vibe and feel da emotional
    mental state..........dis was a reality check of life.
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queen,

    Oh...to that track? now that is deep (no pun intended). You must be a hip hop head. Well you're from the D, everybody from the D should know who BOSS is. well that is if thy're into the musical pulse of the world. The piece is still and will remain tight.
     
  5. Legacy21

    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Rich and Blak. So many of my emotions and life experiences are tied into this piece. Seeing this in any young woman's eyes is frightening, because no woman should have to live like this. I can only write what I live, and see reflected in the experiences of others. I just hope people can feel me, and help save someone else. Cause sometimes its just so hard
     
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    A gripping piece. Totally visuallizing..
     
  7. Legacy21

    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the compliments yall.
     
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    well my sister you wrote a beautiful peace.. one that should be shared with every woman.. taught to every little girl.. and awaken to the sins of the world.. Ones that have no respect for those whom he allows to bring forth life in this world.... simply beautiful... and now i resign.. breatheless.. for i felt every part.. and understood every word. almost like flash backs.. back to the meditation... :)
     
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    deep flow my sister............now it's time to heal my sisters
     
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    this was so deep it cut me
     
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