Black Poetry : Fusion

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Laydee Chups, Jun 22, 2003.

  1. Laydee Chups

    Laydee Chups Active Member MEMBER

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    Fusion

    My hands run their way down my body as I ripple it slowly
    Pulsating base resonates in my ears and I am one with the music
    Reaching for the ground, about to wind back up again
    I feel your hands gently touch my hips as you approach me from behind
    As you wrap your arms around my waist I cannot help but smile
    I don’t feel self-conscious or ashamed of this dance that I’m doing
    We take over the room as our bodies entwine and we merge into the rhythm
    I’ve never felt more alive, I want to lose myself in you

    Your hands run their way down my body as I ripple it slowly
    The music has stopped but the pounding of me heart resonates in my ears
    Reaching my arms up to your neck, you know what I’m about to do
    I feel your breath gently on my lips as you lean towards me
    As you drop your hands lower and draw me closer I cannot help but smile
    I don’t feel embarrassed or awkward about what we’re doing
    We take over the room as our hands knit together and we fuse together
    I’ve never felt more alive, I’m never gonna let you go







    .... i realised after writing this that it sonds like i'm descrbing something other than what I intended. maybe its my mind.
     
  2. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is very beautiful....I think I understood the underlying message. Although it does sound a little different on da surface, both topics are beautiful to write about. :D

    Much love poet.

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a great flow with superb imagery...of what it's like on the dance floor when everything around you fades except for you, that other person and the intensity between the two. Great flow!
     
  4. Laydee Chups

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    Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it. I haven't written properly for months now so I was afraid it would turn out horribly. XD I think I'll go write some more now.
     
  5. mz_agapeluv

    mz_agapeluv Active Member MEMBER

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    sensual, sugestive.slow dance of the mind...... beautiful
     
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