Black Poetry : From A Secret Admirer

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  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dropped this in your locker, written in red, just for you...:heart:

    My first intangible love
    I understand you beyond
    All bounds of complex concoction
    Beyond bounds of perplexity,
    Psychological influences,
    and all those things which
    peruse the mind to make
    a spirit to understand
    the soul and to explore
    the body - can you see
    what I see? The real question
    being - does she see what I see in you?
    Does she savour the knowledge
    in every fold of your intellect
    Can see appreciate the varieties of
    Splendour that your wondrous mind withholds?
    Fruits of joy
    Grapes of genius
    Bananas of beauty
    Oranges of origins of originality
    Those strawberries of sweetness
    Those apples of admiration
    Those melons of most merciful and miraculous majesty
    The majesty that you contain
    The kind that shines through the time
    That this earth has served you not
    you that serve it
    It was meant for your bliss
    And I can only wish
    One day you may fill my enormous need
    To love, to feel, to breathe,
    in every particle -- that makes you
    the wonderful being you have
    proven to me....

    :heart: :heart: I Gotta Crush on you... :heart: :heart:

    Tagged, Your Admirer


    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  2. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    with that big bowl of fruit...the image of which is so clear and lush
    hope you share yourself secret admirer..or is that part of the rush?
    nice flow...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was sweet a release so divine u go gurl !!!!
     
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    Oh, wow! I miss high school and those secret crushes.. you bought back the memory, perfectly.
     
  5. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love you guys

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    this was nice...thinkin bout them days way back then...mmhmmm nice sweet drop flow it
     
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    This was far beyond the cuteness of a crush. The imagery in this piece, those fruits produced a bountiful harvest. Wow poet. :bowdown:
     
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    mmm...mmm...mmm.....

    Love the analogy of the fruit...
    very original...
    You captured the feeling of
    that "back in the day" kind
    of crush so well...

    Feeling this...
    @@@@@@@@@
    Pay the love forward...
    Sage
     
  9. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was very nice and original...I was feeling it.
     
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    oh yes i double up on the sentiments already spoken...
    This SUPERCEDES a crush
    this is love blossoming at its fullet
    as a matter of a fact...it has blossomed and bore LUSH RIPE fruit
    I LOVED that imagery it was mouth watering :)
    so lovely to have you back sista you have been missed :)
     
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