Black Poetry : friend......(im 14, this is my first poem, bear with me. please tell me wat u think)

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  1. baglady

    baglady Member MEMBER

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    Friends......hummmmm......
    What can u say about 'em?
    Sometimes there cool.
    Sometimes i cant stand to think about 'em.
    But Whats the point?
    If they ganna be around when they want to.
    Sometime is miss them...
    But then i rememeber they werent tru.

    So here i am
    sittin' here all alone....
    sittin' here wishin' i wasnt feeling this poem.

    Sometimes i pray
    Askin' HIM to send me someone
    Someone that really cares
    Someone that i can really talk to.

    I really need someone GOD!
    someone!anyone who really cares!

    but i guess HE dont care either
    cause all my prayers have seem to fallen on deaf ears

    im tired of crying...... every night from this pain.
    im tired of wanting to die.
    im tired of being alone.

    but aparently no one gives a danm

    even though all i wanted

    was a friend to call my own......danm........:(
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi baglady, :wave:

    I think this is a nice first effort. HE cares about you, honey!! God will bless you with what you need in time. Give it some time, you'll find a friend and someone to talk to. Hang on and look toward tomorrow cause I promise it will be brighter!!

    Your life is precious, sweetie!!

    God must have heard you, cause you already have a friend in me!!

    I wish you all the best!!

    Keep writing and posting!!

    Welcome to the family!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    thank you, that actually means alot to me. made me feel a little better too. thank you for taking the time.
     
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    hey gurl,
    feelin you so much on this one. but don't ever let this get you down. don't ever think HE doesn't hear you or HE doesn't care.
    HE is always there, HE is a friend you already have - a friend we ALL have. HE DOES care - HE gave you the talent to express your feelings in poems. that's great ain't it.
    keep posting your art - i'd really like to read some more - and you'll find so many friends here. whatever gets you depressed let it flow outta your pen right on this site - and we all will help. we are family

    and WELCOME WELCOME WELCOME. good to have you here :love:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground

    he so care and giveth u the wisdom
    to scribe as u flow poetry is da key
    to healing u know
    i feel ya verse in ya poem
    welcome to da family :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ... nice flow

    i like ya flow... can relate to the content... but like my people said above... it gets better... ya know??? every cloud has a silver lining... & if ya catch it just right... it sometimes has a gold lining :)...

    so let this love we offer embrace ya like this BIIIIGGGG ole HUUUGGG i'm giving ya :)... and remember HE always hears... and HE'S always near... don't ya ever forget that!!!

    peace

    p.s.... welcome, welcome... WELCOME!!! :) :) :)
     
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    baglady Member MEMBER

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    haha. thanks u guys, this is the only place i feel love so i stay here all day. thank you for the warm welcomes
     
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    most welcome happy u like it here upon us
    poetry is the warmth of ya heart and emotions flowin'
    enjoy ya self here on destee's
     
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    Hey baglady this is a nice flow
    much love to you :grouphug: your
    prays are being answer.
    Welcome welcome to the family :)
    flow on.much love to you
    Peace
     
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    welcome to destees

    wassup gurl, I'm lovin ya flow on the real, but always remember that HE loves u, and is always with u. I hope u like ur stay here and i welcome u to destees place, much love! :)

    peace,
    -story
     
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