Black Poetry : Freedom Fighters...

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  1. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    (sorry for the length. it all needs to be there.)

    I fell,
    and drowned.
    Then choked...
    As I burned the stripes of unity.
    I saw the smoke.
    Under the cherry moon.
    I battled Americas platoon.
    They witnessed a falling legend.
    And before my death,
    I fathomed liberty.
    And disregarded the rest.
    ”Be strong!”
    Is what the concrete whispered...
    When my face spoke with the pavement.
    I left behind my blood type,
    but never a tear.
    Never the words they wanted to hear.
    Never the anguish they wanted to see.
    When they spitted on my pride...
    And ****ed on my dignity.
    They called me cat.
    I preferred panther.
    I wrote my soul down in ink,
    and ate the paper.
    America dissected me,
    but didn’t find what they were looking for.
    I had a goal.
    They had one too.
    The sun torched an impression into my mind...
    That’s just the color of my skin.
    My foot pierced into the darkness,
    and crushed the greatest of men.
    I shot into the sky.
    Then hit the faces of those who opposed me.
    And I watched them drown in their sorrow,
    which leaked through their open wounds
    the softest glimmer of a dark red.
    “By any means necessary”
    X
    Gave us breath,
    Which I inhaled,
    But continued to drink…
    From the well of broken dreams.
    Shattered hearts
    And lack of education
    Brings down our morality
    We can’t win the war,
    But I…
    I fought for the recognition.
    “We need to keep the peace”
    But not until I let out my aggression.
    Not until they perish
    Not until they catch the disease called poverty
    Not untill they bleed.
    Not untill they see... That black is beautiful.
    Not until we rise
    Not until their pores leak non-apartheid
    “We shall overcome.”
    The words spoken by a king.
    Assassinated for being what he was born to be.
    We cant save America
    We remain political refugees.
    We let them drain our veins for every ounce.
    I sit and count…
    The seconds that turn to minutes
    Flash to hours…
    And form our days.
    Only their defeat will resuscitate my joy
    They fled with beaten faces,
    And I pursued with broken knuckles.
    “Keep on!”
    Is what I heard!
    No time to take a rest.
    They took what belonged to you.
    At least hold on to your Breath,
    while we advance underwater.
    We tussled for tomorrow.
    And then died today.
    I held my bloody fist clenched ... high above my head.
    And let the people see...
    We were freedom fighters.

    WuN...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done this was tyte
     
  3. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the ummm reply?

    WuN...
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    MY BROTHER
    this is a deep scribe
    yes we do hear you
    i like how you place
    the course of histroy
    in your flow display
    feeling the message
    wonderful indeed
    spread your word
    flow your flow
    we are reading
    much love
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very deep piece, felt this!
     
  6. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the feed bluewater.
    can anyone give me more than a line of feed ?
    thanks.

    WuN...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hear ya brother. If you read through my responses to threads, you will see that I usually do a better job. But if I am sleepy and I see someone new on the board, I have to hit them with at least some type of response, so they will at least feel welcomed here. In my tired state, I said that your other piece was deep, well felt and posed....at least I didn't just say good job. :)
    In this piece, I felt a warrior who was willing to fight with his last breath, not giving the persecutors the satisfaction of seeing him suffer, for he will always be a king, and we will always be royalty. We must remember our royal lineage as we continue our fight. I appreciated the positive message in this piece, and it flowed so well, the length didn't make me hesitate to read til the end.

    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    revisit this one , fighters of freedom
     
  9. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i love how you put it down on this one flo on poet.
     
  10. TichaonaMC

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    Freedom Fighters

    this was my favorite part out of the whole poem. it captured, very poetically, the phrase you can kill a revolutionary but you can't kill revolution. and i loved how you their voices continued the struggle of their lives even in "death throes".

    looking forward to reading more
     
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