Poetry Critiques : Free?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by carsonh, Sep 24, 2008.

  1. carsonh

    carsonh Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Slaves no more!
    We are free!
    Free!
    Free?
    Are we?
     
  2. asimplepoet

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    You have made a major point with such few words. This was a job :welldone:
     
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    Haaaaaaaaaaay CarsonH ... :wave: ... i am LOVING this peace !!!

    ~ i wanna be freeeeeeeeee ~ :toast:

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    Definitely makes you think. Succinctly posed.
     
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    great write and smooth thinking , i sho nuff wanna be free from the spell
     
  6. carsonh

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    i think we all wanna be free of the spell. :laugh: lol
     
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    and with us in unity and uniting as a people we can over come this and get ourselves free.
     
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    only a few words can bring so much to mind...
    a few lines have me reevaluating life
    you know your gifted when you can do that
     
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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!




    carsonh,

    Great piece, I agree with all posters!

    Its just that some of yall stuff is beginning to rub off on me-:), so, here goes the answer to the question (don't yall laugh too hard)-:):


    No, not free
    we belong to thee



     
  10. carsonh

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    i kinda like that.
     
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