Black Poetry : Free Verse...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by ILL, Jun 12, 2006.

  1. ILL

    ILL Active Member MEMBER

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    This is just a little abstract something something I wrote one night...
    and did i mention it's hard to understand...sorry.

    I'm remembering you....
    as if your gone
    no longer occupying this space
    no longer wanting and needing to expierence my embrace
    to lose yourself
    when you stare in my face....
    i'm mesmerized by the way we are
    and the ways I long for us to be
    blinded by the red rimmed haze of the possibilities
    the possibilities of infinite pleasure
    longing to be
    close
    next
    deep
    off in the depths of you
    of feeling your skin
    warm and coco-brown sweet
    burning impressions in my mind of your scent
    and the pain I feel
    wondering if you were heaven sent
    to punish me for the past hearts that i've played with
    and the guilt I feel for secretly wanting this
    crush I have to be real
    you got my mind reeling
    In the night time....
    I dream of finding the right time
    to say things like...
    I LOVE YOU
    and you're the one my heart longs to be with
    insecurities have me scared to
    unwind completly in your presence
    will you like what you see...?
    beauty that lays only skin deep
    and this feeling
    it makes me want to slowly walk backwards
    and wish you away...
    wish away the pending pain of my solo dance in the rain
    to wish away the thoughts of knowing
    when i open my eyes from this most
    enchanting trance
    there wont be so much as a trace
    that this.......

    was real....

    that....

    you....

    were real.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Love come in many ways false and deep
    through lies speaking sweet
    yet da heart get lost in the mist
    when it feel a happiness
    til the door slam ! Bam)))))

    I feel ya on this free verse
    that can be reversed .......

    Nice flow and felt da depth of this scribe.
     
  3. ILL

    ILL Active Member MEMBER

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    that kind of sounds like a co-lab...
    i might have to get with you on that
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up we can bounce lines and give life to a scribe
    i'm holding you to it
     
  5. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aight I got you on that.

    Love is a mother,
    and the messed up part
    is you never know
    when you find another lover,
    who stimulates your mine
    and just wants to spend their time
    with only you.
    Yet we still keep looking
    searching for the essence
    of that feeling
    we onced felt.
    but it wasn't the same
    that person was not the other.

    The funny part about this is that I was at a venue the other day called Free Verse in San Antonio, TX.
     
  6. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Okay... I got next

    i long to feel you
    beside me
    inside me
    where you once lived
    the state you occupied
    was me
    the space you claimed
    my heart
    four hundred years of oppression
    i willingly denounced
    you owned me
    but now
    you don't love me anymoore
    my love's as wothless
    like a penny with a hole in it
    but my whole soul is still in it
    you asked me to show myself
    be woman enough to be myself
    and when i did you denied me
    Defiaston
    the one thing i ever really wanted
    You
    Ignoring mly sickness as pleas
    or trying to be pleasing for attention
    I cannot help that I'm
    ILL
    i'm still savoring your sweetness
    years after my first taste
    Only describable by one word
    Rich
    How can I move on
    Love you are you
    Please don't DEFI me the ILLicit RICHness
    Of you, me, us
    I need you
    You are my drug
     
  7. ILL

    ILL Active Member MEMBER

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    Awwwww....i'm over here cheesin' like a mutha....Thank y'all and i'm gonna try to think on my toes and keep it going....again.

    Injecting the purest form
    of happiness into my veins
    i tried seekin' treatment
    and it almost drove me insane
    i can't believe this is what's left of us
    were the happiest moments of my life lived in vain...?
    Just tell me...
    was it something I quit doing the same?
    and now, these days
    I just long to be with you
    I can't trust you...
    I mean...
    I just long to be with you
    I can't trace you...
    I just long to...
    love...
    it floats...
    on and on and on
    love...
    i still love
    you...
    and i'm left to crave the intimacy
    we once shared
    hurt because you moved on
    and my feelings...
    you didn't spare..........

    next up.....:jump:
     
  8. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what you never saw is that
    you never really loved me
    until i let you go
    you were never open to me
    i wasn't your drug
    she was your drug
    how foolish of me to think
    you were ever really mine
    it wasn't my name you
    whispered in your sleep
    it was hers
    you told me you
    once wanted a family
    and now you don't any longer
    the truth is
    you wanted one with her
    adn i'm not her
    so once i figured out
    you could never love me
    the way i loved you
    i left you
    i loved you
    i love you
    i wanted you
    i want you
    you whisper my name
    in your sleep
    while you're awake
    in your dreams
    tell the truth
    and shame the devil
    you only loved me
    when i decided i was
    worth loving
     
  9. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    oops, let me get out the way....yall smokin ....great drop, tho ILL
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nothing hard to understand here, got folks coming in and flowing and stuff... You brought a genuine feel to this that so many can relate to Ill. Flow on ya'll.
     
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