Black Poetry : Free Spirit/ my life us together

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Day in , day out my thoughts are
    consumed inside your beings "yet"
    sadness dwells deeply within me
    your heart holds a shameless sin
    the image of a free spirit roams
    embracing then fleein again the
    soul cry out from it's chamber
    leave me laying in my own slumber
    only to return
    looking ova the hills of jordan
    into the mist of tomorrow to see
    all that was left behind
    even though i am shunned by the world
    your never ending love sustains me
    if i didn't feel so close i'll say goodbye
    if i didn't love your eyez, i'll look away
    sometime i stop and think of how life
    use to be of us and i see no blame
    seeing it now differently
    the love & passion my devotion
    and deep emotions i feel rejoice'd
    deep within the beating of my heart
    in the depth of my soul which never
    been seen beyond my reasons in the
    deepest carverns of my beings
    i find u standing there open arms
    i know i love u , spiritually , mentally
    yes emotionally and physically
    i may be empty in this living storm
    but i know i have all of u to enjoy.

    To be continued Pt.II next

    Dyamondluv 2005
    Nu-wave Creation
    $R
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I read this slowly, twice, I felt an ambivalence, a feeling of the heart knowing what dwelled within, and then the mind recognized what the heart knew all along. I could feel the depths of this piece. Looking forward to part 2.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes watz the free spirit of the soul knew
    and the depth of heart felt it long ago now
    the center of my mental has come to know of
    only way is up now !

    Thank u for the great reply and love shared on this deep vent !
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel you, nothing more, nothing less.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a beautiful offering, $$RICH$$. Ima wander over and peep part II now.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thankz 1poet man u know it's all love

    Gempis thank u and yes the offering is large
    do visit pt.2 i'm humbled by your words my dear.
     
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    it's all in the beauty of free spirit when it unlease itself
    from within thankz all for the love here
     
  8. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent Work!

    <fades in>

    Very deep and heartfelt. Really enjoyed the simmering pulse of emotion and passion that wanders between each line of this piece. It is very good to read U again. keep the words moving.

    peace&1luv

    <fades out>
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep emotions flying and i can feel the love you hold this was awesome going to pt 2
     
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    this was soooooooooo good.......I cant wait for part II
     
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