Black Poetry : Free Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by soblessed, Apr 9, 2004.

  1. soblessed

    soblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You have leaded me out of treacherous waters.
    I was drowning in pity.
    Suffocating in pain.
    I was trapped in a bottomless pit reaching out.
    My soul was crying.
    Free Me! Free Me!
    My mind saying I can get through this.
    My spirit says only with God can you make it.
    The sadness rings in my ears.
    The pain echoes in my soul.
    I close my eyes, complete darkness into a deep sleep I go.
    Visions of the past, mistakes I have made, sadness I've experienced, pain I have suffered haunts me.
    Tears begin to roll out of my eyes, one by one.
    Tears that I have held in.
    Each signifying aloss, a deep sorrow, turmoil.
    More tears begin to come.
    I am alone!
    The heartache is so overwhelming it feels as if a knife has pierced my heart.
    I am alone!
    It is quiet, a calmness comes over me.
    A warm gentle feeling, runs through my body.
    I am not alone, he has been with me the whole time.
    Holding me when things were unbearable.
    Loving me, when I felt unloved.
    Never forgetting me, even when I had forgotten him.
    Tears start to come again. Only this time tears of joy.
    He loves me.
    God really loves me.
    God heard my soul crying,
    Free Me! Free me!
    God has freed me.
    I AM FREE!
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, in God we truly are free. I liked the way you described the downward spiral, and then the realization that God has been with you the whole time, raising you back up. Welcome to destee, I'd like to read more from ya.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt u all the way freeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!
    yes lovin it flow on
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin this wow
    flow on vry good read
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Take the shackles off my feet so I can dance.....Love it
     
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    this is a beautiful portrayal of finding the Lord and giving your life to Him....

    soblessed you've really hit the nail on the head on this one....

    mo power to you babe

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so beautiful...
    and soooooo true...
    Flow on poet...
    your work is shining...
     
  8. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for reminding me of the true joy of being free...being free from the bonds that held me. Beautiful, Beautifully Written!

    Joyce
     
  9. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Crying out to God does something for the soul all by itself
    But to have God answer that cry is momentous!
    This poem is desperation giving way to relief-
    You conveyed the two well!!!

    Much props on your creativity
    I felt this one!

    PEACE AND LOVE
    twision
     
  10. one_love

    one_love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That's all anybody is ever looking for, just to be free. Very deep poem.
    One_Love
     
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