Black Poetry : ...Fragile Girl...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Aug 17, 2004.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i hope i don't offend anybody...but i just write what i go through and i apologize if i do offend someone...


    she's hidden in the shadowed feelings of herself
    ice cold with no love not even for herself
    no one knows who she is or why she's here
    but i know as i see her hesistate with fear
    i know because i had the same look at one point in time
    i was going to commit murder to another at one time
    i didn't know if i could survive with my seed
    the doctor said i would leave this world or my unborn baby
    so i stood in the door just as she now abides
    grief stricken face and no where dark to hide
    i don't know the reason for her wanting to take a life
    but even in my justification i knew it wasn't right
    tears streaming down fast and i could see clear
    flooding fluidly down she can't explain her tears
    she walks down the steps and back to the door
    she looks around to see who notices her horror
    i quickly look down but not in time enough
    her eye catches mine in time soon enough
    i look back to see her shaking her fragile head
    she takes out a phone, dials, and then fidgets
    she looks at me and i stare into those fearful eyes
    i faintly here her voice talking as she cries
    i stand and begin to walk slow and quietly past
    she stops me with her hands knowing i understand
    with a cascade of tears into the phone she says a few words
    "mommy i'm pregnant and all i need is your love"
    i touch my growing stomach and smile at this fragile girl
    walking back down the street into a confused world...
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sis drop ya flows..this was tight and i enjoyed this read...
    release your emotions.....release
    and always be you love and respect thas what we are about....love ya!!


    i can feel the emotions in this piece, as i read it very touching
    Peace unto you
    Angel
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks girl...i'm glad u liked it...i dont really like the way i write lately..but at least it lets me get my emotions out...
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when we write it releases them emotions we need to get out....so release flow......nothing but love for you... and we our still building this foundation of poetry love respect and bonding my sweet sista.....just release.....:grouphug:
     
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    This is a moment in time that some do have to experience. You expressed the fear here very well. Nothing wrong in this flow that I could see. Keep writing with feeling as you do.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    [email protected]...[email protected]...[email protected].....woooo, that one touched a serious nerve....but naw ma, I ain't offended at alll

    this was a deep flow LovelyG
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    First, let me give you this :grouphug:

    and tell you that you are not alone, not today, not tomorrow, not ever. Powerful piece, poet.
     
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    How could i ever get offended,
    by a poem as real, and emotionally revealing as yours.
    im glad you shared your wisdom through writing with me
    :read:
     
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    Now that was emotional and I appreciate you lettin me FEEEEL wit ya. I like how you placed us there with you. The eyes played a big role in the understanding of your beautiful characters (real or not). Wonderful expression.

    -Muse
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwwwwwww deep sistah wow u really let da emotions out here
     
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