Black Poetry : FORGIVE US OUR "TRESPASSES"

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Forgive me , forgiven him ,
    how pron thee are to sin
    reach out grap , hold a friend
    turn back unto a unity stand
    it wasn't design but by plan
    of every black woman & man

    Forgive thy trespasses
    from da self unknown madness
    thy pleasure of heart one's invade
    resistlessly through thy crimes
    i'm ready to pay wit my tyme
    the loyality of love to give my kind

    From brother to brother
    sister , mother child
    guilty of the hope and sunny smile
    forgive thy trespassing of care
    and the beauty my soul has bared
    and unconditionally willingly fair

    Forgive me not i'm not ashame
    nor do my finger point to blame
    but my head arise yes to claim
    my will of knowledge never tame
    forgive me as i do you the same
    beyond individual self flicked fame

    Forgive my brother whom will sin
    forgive da broken wheel and deep bend
    forgive the yesterday's gone by
    forgive in morrow's beyond da lie
    forgive today for da pain one's lay
    forgive for when anger seek & prey

    As a we , us forgive to see another day
    in my hand is da sorrow of deceive
    and many lashies my body breed
    how broken untruth my eyez now read
    in a war this battle my spirit bleed
    for da mindz to open & fly free
    i'm just another man of his creed

    Asking as i giveth unto thee
    as man silently da eyez weep
    but thy fight i will never flee
    to seek and bring back unity
    forces will mend , mind will be free
    one day i know we all will be forgiven
    COMPLETE as black people see

    Not about just you and me
    but our culture /hood and family
    people we know and surely see
    even the one's cyberly
    forgive forgive forgive and be happy
     
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    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a great wrie and I love the double speak and take time to think please request. I really get it and love that you posted it at this time. I guess we are on the same wave length.

    help me out with the first stanza ..... I read it and re read it

    I love this piece

    Patrice
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Thank u sista the first part is how we sin as it reflects on all
    of us as a whole now to reach out to a sista or brutha it was
    plan for us to be in unity.
     
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    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok thank you for the explanation. Sometimes we get stumped. With the explanation I agree with myself that it is well written even with the twists and echos.

    peace

    Patrirce
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Forgiveness is freeing, although it does take some time to get there. First step is knowing that forgiveness is a possibility. I appreciate the way you posed this piece Rich.
     
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    correct watz thank u dear for the continue love and support
     
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    A great and timely write. It takes strength of character to forgive.

    Bravo! Bravo!
     
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    yes indeed it truely do ...thankz robboy
     
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