Poetry Critiques : Forgive me

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  1. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sorry but
    Even a saint can catch a case.
    I'm no saint but hey-
    I've seen angels in a rage, with a demons face.
    How does this equate you say?
    This relates because ;
    I'm begging for forgiveness.
    If you just give this
    To me
    I promise I'll never be
    That person again.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this poem speaks from heart
    fitting for forgiveness structured nice
    don't change a line ....very nice
     
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    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like it but....what about next?Yes u apologize,but have u been forgive?If not,if u don't have a second chance,that means the person ain't worthy of ur love cuz it comes from the bottom of ur heart.In life we shoulde be radical!!!
     
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    Nice poem Iwannabe, there is definately strength in humility
     
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    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re:Forgive

    Wannabee, Have you ever heard of the saying " not to Forgive is not To Live"
    Excellent! :dance1: :hearts1: :great: :lift:
     
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