Black Poetry : forgive me...

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    {Her apology to him after being caught in the arms of her lover}
    {prelude to a love story--short story}

    forgive me
    this wrong i've delivered against us
    that's causing you pain
    and to question my trust

    forgive me
    this grief i've bestowed upon you
    the tears you've shed and the loss of sleep, too

    forgive me
    this moment forever etched upon your mind
    a picture of me with another...forever strewn across time

    forgive me
    this lapse in judgment that chased you away
    and caused you to forget all reason to stay
    that one lone straw...i've planted in your eye
    you never started an argument...didn't even ask why

    forgive me
    this disruption...to family and love
    the bad you didn't call me...and all you thought of

    forgive me

    as the days pass by with the nights growing long
    i relive the tragedy of love gone wrong
    i imagine the look of betrayal on your face
    as i lie with another between sheets trimmed in lace
    the pain of that reality
    seeps slowly into your soul
    face contorted with anger
    mind, boggled...out of control
    if you find it within you
    to forgive me this one
    never, again
    will i lie down in another man's arms

    forgive me

    so long i did wait
    for small dreams to come true
    yet, i casually tossed away
    all hopes of being with you
    you gave me my world
    and what did i do
    i castrated your heart
    i'm not worthy of you

    as the sun did set
    where the sky met the sea
    i lossed all hope of "US"
    ...even threw away "WE"
    one tear, i did shed
    after reality set in
    to regain your trust
    i must locate my man

    when i find you, i hope
    you've had sufficient time
    to process the pain
    to divvy up the fine
    my callousness...1 point
    my actions...3 times
    an affair--not of the heart
    i cannot defind
    i would assess many points
    to the pain i've caused you
    then set an enornous price
    to ensure love is true

    FORGIVE ME.

    please.

    i love you.
     
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    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was beautiful...and sad all at the same time. I enjoyed the read...
     
  3. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks shaneak...

    ...trying to get a good opener for this short story i'm writing. thanks for the read.

    Onelove
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Baller ~

    I love it! It's well written & also well-thought out!

    Thank you for sharing it here with us!

    One.
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2...

    glad you liked it...thanks for reading me.

    One.
     
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    wonderful expression....i felt the emotion as i was reading it....one, LEZ
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    BALLER

    DES IS BEAUTIFUL
    WHAT A OPENNER
    DES SHORT STORY BOOK
    WILL BANG!!:toast:
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks, y'all...

    there is much to be forgiven for...hmmm.

    One.
     
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