Black Poetry : Forever with Her

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  1. Sodwn2earth

    Sodwn2earth Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I knew before you had a love.
    A love that reached through the sky above.
    The feelings you had for her were intense.
    Nothing could stop the forever you had planned.
    I could tell she stunned you.
    You revered her in awe.
    In her eyes held your hope, the answers among all.
    I know that she gave to you, a feeling you thought long lost.
    So sorry that your heart and soul had to be the cost.
    You were in a state of bliss, something that you very much deserved.
    Contentedness, after such hard lessons learned.
    But you are with her no longer, cuz now you are with me.
    So sudden an end to your ecstasy.
    And now that I have you, I see what she had.
    She was quite a lucky girl, but oh well, too bad.
    The feelings you had, the ones I mentioned before?
    I gathered them through your work and more.
    And as I read of your feelings for her, I could see your heart spilling red blood.
    I could see the crimson tear drops falling from your eyes,
    because the love you had for her didn’t survive.
    She took you for granted, so unaware.
    That the words you spoke held meaning beyond compare.
    Every whisper uttered in her ear was a dream come true,
    feelings so intense, a feeling long overdue.
    I know that you wanted to spend the rest of your life with her.
    It was clear to see.
    Every heart wrenching word, steeped in your loves misery.
    I know you would have been content, to have her as your own.
    Our paths would have never crossed. For me to continue on alone.
    But now that I am with you, now that you are mine, how can you be sure
    that I am now the love of your life?
    When a short while ago you were saying those same words.
    Only difference was your heart belonged to her.
    What is to say you may never find her again?
    Your value brought to light, she may want a second chance.
    How will I know that you can resist?
    How will I know you won’t once again, long for the taste of her lips?
    How do you know now, that you are again ready to love?
    If you had the chance, would you spend forever with her?
     
  2. AHMOSE

    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The writer expressed her feelings of her new love excellently in this piece. I only wait to see what her love has to say about it all..
    Thanx for sharing...
     
  3. Sodwn2earth

    Sodwn2earth Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was his reply:
    "How could I when words such as yours constantly fill my ear.... For your love is beyond her ability to compare...."
     
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    re:Forever

    I don't want to call you a girl or guy because I don't know but this poem got my attention. Excellent write. :jump:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All a person can do is to try one's best to make sure that you're ready to move on to another love. This was an intense piece, so well written. Flow on poet.
     
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    Nice write and welcome
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was str8 up tyte and off the hook

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of respect & peace
    welcome from above blessing u some love

    look to read more of u and u share and
    give love within welcome poet !!!!!
     
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    whoa this really hit me. sweet write.
     
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    Fill his heart with future sense...
    ...Instead of past tense
    For if he look at you and see You...you will know
    if he looks at you and see her...you'll know that too
    wonderful flow poet and thanks for sharing
     
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