Black Poetry : Forever Gone

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  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don't tell me I mean nothing, when I know that it's me you love,
    Your promises are useless, your lies have hurt enough,
    How can you say that it's been a waste of three years?
    Why do you believe that I deserve all these tears?
    I never tried to hurt you, I never caused you pain,
    Yet you stare and laugh at me, when I cry again,
    How can you be so hurtful after all that we've been through?
    After all the future plans we've made and all the "I love you"s,
    Don't pretend you don't care and come home drunk another night,
    Don't start abusing me and looking for another fight,
    I should have seen it sooner, I should have seen it coming,
    That long ago it was me, you stopped forever loving.


    15/4/02
    *Emma*
     
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    Emma.


    i won't assume that you were writing from your own
    personal experience 'cause that "assuming" happens
    too **** much on the poetry page! (LOL) but i will say
    that this piece is tru-ly touching & was felt deep-ly.
    thank you for sharing. :)
     
  4. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sherykah - thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.

    Rich - a wise piece of advice, ty

    Sunshyne - always a pleasure to see you on my pages. U were right not to assume, because unlike most of my pieces, this one was not written from personal experience. Me? Commit? Never! Lol. I'm glad the piece had some effect. Thank you for your comments.

    Much Love
    *Emma*
     
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    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...>floats in>

    Although the poem conveys a sense of saddness even regret in some instances, the way you expressed it was truely elegant. You have a very strong voice when it comes to maintaining and holding a rhyme metre, your words flow almost like a song. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Needless to say, I was touched/moved by your words because within the rhyme you also did an excellent job of conveying the feeling of lost, and hurt common to broken relationships.

    Very nice!

    <floats out<...
     
  6. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much for your in depth response Legendof. I do try to maintain my rhyme, actually I find it hard to write poetry without it. I believe that a poem can convey or evoke emotion then it has done it's job and you certainly made me feel as though this piece has. Thank you for your kind words.
    *Emma* :) See you made me smile!
     
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    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've been thinking about why I wrote this poem, since I normally only write from experience, and I've come to the conclusion that this is what I'm afraid of. This exact situation is the reason I'm committment phobic. Ok, well just wanted to add that. Thanks.
    *Emma*
     
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    Hmmmmmmmmm...

    Deep!! I can dig this!!
    Tyte Scribe Poet!
     
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    Nice flow Emma.

    I can relate, a
    broken heart can
    make one fear love
    and commitment.
    Thanks for sharing. :)


    Scribeaboutit!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rashad, Coco - Thanks for understanding and relating, your words are appreciated my friends.

    *Emma*
     
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