Black Poetry : Forbidden

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  1. Leaky103

    Leaky103 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi, I'm new to this website and I just wanted to post a couple of my poems for comments. I'm a native New Yorker; however, I moved to Georgia four years ago. The first poem is entitled "Forbidden"

    WE MET ON THE ELEVATOR, SECLUDED
    AND YOUR EYES GREATLY ALLUDED
    TO THE FACT YOU WERE ATTRACTED TO MY PHYSIQUE
    WHEN I PEERED DOWN AND NOTICE YOUR JOHNSON GREET
    AND SALUTE TO THIS FORBIDDEN ENCOUNTER
    BECAUSE YOU WERE ABOUT TO BE #75 ON MY SEX COUNTER.
    FOR I WAS NOT LOOKING FOR AN EVERLASTING LOVE
    I ONLY WANTED TO GET A PIECE AND HOPED YOU'D WEAR A GLOVE.
    SO AS YOU MOVED CLOSER TO MY FEET,
    WE BOTH KNEW THE MOANS WOULD NOT BE DISCREET
    FOR I WAS AS MY FRIENDS SAY, AN UNDERCOVER FREAK
    AND IT WAS YOUR FANTASIES I WANTED TO MEET.
    WITHIN THESE FEW MINUTES OF INCREDIBLE SEX,
    YOU WILL FORGET WHAT'S HER NAME -- AH, YOUR EX.
    AFTER WE WERE DONE WITH OUR DIRTY CHORE,
    YOU RANGED THE ELEVATOR FOR YOUR DESTINATED FLOOR
    AND WE BOTH WALKED OFF TOWARD THE SAME DOOR
    AS WE WERE GREETED BY YOUR FIANCEE, MY FRIEND THE ONE WE ADORE.
    I FELT THE GUILT WRITTEN ON MY FACE
    AS YOU GREETED HER WITH A WARM EMBRACE
    AND THEN GAVE HER A SLIP OF YOUR TONGUE
    AS IF YOU HAD DONE DONE NOTHING WRONG.
    DO I TELL HER OF OUR UNEXPECTED TWIST
    OR LET HER REMAIN OUT OF THE MIX?
    I DECIDE WE MUST PLAY IT COOL AND SAY NOTHING
    BUT OOH YOUR SEX WAS THE BEST SOMETHING, SOMETHING.
    IT'S TIME FOR ME TO LEAVE THIS JOINT
    AND REMAIN SILENT AT THIS POINT.
    NOW IT'S THREE MONTHS LATER
    AND MY STOMACH IS BECOMING GREATER
    AND SHE IS FILLED WITH TOTAL ELATION
    NOT REALIZING THIS IS OUR "CREATION".
    THE TRUTH I CAN NO LONGER KEEP
    BECAUSE SHE NEEDS TO KNOW THAT I CREEPED
    UNEXPECTEDLY TO THE MAN OF HER DREAMS
    AND LEARN WHAT "FORBIDDEN" MEANS.
    FOR NOW WHERE I AM
    IS STUCK WITH A BABY AND MO MAN
    AND WITH A PAIN THAT DEEPLY HURTS
    AS I LOST A FRIEND BECAUSE TO HER MAN I LIFTED MY SKIRT.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the :new: home u found upon
    family & friendz u be kin too love da flow of u
    as u scribe love is given as u give peace welcome
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: welcome to destee
    likes ya flow....Peace Angel
     
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    Leaky103,
    Great poetic flow, a story entertainingly told, you poetically kept my attention to watch it unfold, what a predicament, what results to hold. You weild a Talented Pen.

    Peace and Blessing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...what a sticky situation you penned...liked the way you worked this as Rasheed said, this poetically kept my attention too.
     
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    very well versed

    i was feelin dat to the fullest kepp it right
     
  7. poeticlyspeakin

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    Welcome

    this poem is deep. I feel ur pain. keep flowin...
     
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    You told this story well!...Betrayal, deceit, distrust, and karma.


    Hopefully others can get a lesson from it too!



    And :birthday:

     
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