Black Poetry : for the last time

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  1. SweetBlack

    SweetBlack Member MEMBER

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    she huddled in the corner
    to avoid the next blow
    the walls are echoing
    "Daddy, NO!"
    his fingerprints blue
    on her wrist
    now she know why it's
    called a "vice grip"
    sitting still stunned she
    knows she can't breath
    she's wondering why before
    this she didn't leave.
    the murderous look in his
    face makes her want
    to cry but one side
    is swollen shut and she
    needs her good eye.
    he drags her by her
    hair just as she caught her
    breath and she
    realizes someone has
    revoked her choices
    of life or death.
    she thinks of her
    children having endured
    this pain and wonders if
    they'll grow up to be the same.
    she considers how his
    lifestyle has taken its toll
    by just as she's fading
    he cracks her skull.
    there she lay in
    the threshold of their
    room she thought
    of the anger she
    has comsumed.
    she reaches her
    hand under the bed for
    the gun he ironically
    use to put to her
    head and told that
    "MUTHAPHUCKA, LAY ON THE BED...
    I KNOW YOU DON'T HEAR
    A WORD I SAY BUT THAT **** GON'
    END RIGHT HERE AND TODAY...
    I JUST WANNA KNOW...
    WHY YOU DO IT...
    AND I PROMISE, THE WRONG
    WORDS AND *****
    YOU BLEW IT...
    BETTER YET, I DON'T
    WANNA HEAR IT...
    LOOK AT ME , MUTHAPHUCKA
    NOW IM LIFE OR DEATH...
    FEAR IT!
    she's trembling now and
    she wants to pray but...
    "BUT I GOT JUST ONE
    THING TO SAY...
    YOU BELITTLE MY INTELLIGENCE
    EVERY CHANCE YOU GOT
    WHETHER I KNEW ABOUT
    THE SIMPLIST THINGS
    OR NOT...
    NOW I'M THE ONE
    STANDING HERE HOLDING
    THIS GLOCK....
    I KNOW YOU DOUBTIN'
    ME, BUT CONSIDER IT DONE...
    AND I'MA BE FAIR AND GIVE
    YOU 1 SECOND TO
    GET YO' **** AND RUN
    BEFORE I TAKE THE SAFETY
    OFF THIS GUN.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    HEY WELCOME to the poetic playground
    nice flow well felt ...deep !
     
  3. Alizentang

    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jawdrop:WHOA!:jumping:

    That's pretty much all I can say. Took me there with this one. Got chill bumps and ****!!

    :jumping:WELCOME TO DESTEE'S:jumping:

    WHOA I'm still trippin off this one.
    Can't wait to read more of you!!

    Much Love
    :heart:Alize:heart:
     
  4. SweetBlack

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    Oh, Thank you, Alize! That means alot....i too admire your work.
     
  5. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa!!! I don't know what to say......tyte...that was tyte
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :eek::eeek::jawdrop:
    dang dat was deeeep!!!!!!
    very vivid i felt like i was there.
    flow on gurl!

    much love,
    -story
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm speechless. that was so.......hot.
     
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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    caused me to shake
     
  9. angelicsage

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    Your a phenomenal writer, this was so moving!
     
  10. SweetBlack

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    You all makin' me blush. thanks for ALL THE SUPPORT AND ENCOURAGMENT.

    one love.
     
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