Black Poetry : ...For Real...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by triniti424, Sep 16, 2008.

  1. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I understand the desire to just flow with it the way it hits you, but you did go around the asterisk system in place more than a few times. My main focus however, is my admiration of the piece itself.. There's your use of alliteration, your humorous asides, word play, and most of all your description of how this place makes us feel. We find ourselves exactly in the spot where we say we'd not go, bull's eye poetess.
     
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    It's no longer how or when you got there, but will you stay.
    As we use to say: "When it's dead, it's done"...let us re-new our souls under the sun.
    Great piece poet!
     
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    Sista girl i believe that everyone has wondered a time or two; How did they get in such a predictment. But I am not sure they ask the question as exquistely as you did right here mys siter. Way to do the [email protected] thing!!! :welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how u got there is not the key but will u stay inside this reality
    being dat woman so in love sopmetime a blessing from above
    but i sho nuff feel ya sis .......hummm!
     
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    feeling you

    i wonder sometimes too how did i get to this place



    i see those words you typed around

    :eek:oops:
     
  7. triniti424

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    Thank you so much family

    :em0400: Yeaaaaah I kina knew I was asking for it from the DCC ( Destee Communications Committee lol) There was a lot of anger sis and so um :sigh: it wont happen again lol I'll let the asteriks censor me lol Thank you for reading sister :grouphug:

    Amen sister, Cause stayin is suicide Thank you my sister for reading :grouphug:

    Thank you sister :) From you its a great compliment indeed :grouphug:

    Thank you brotha Rich for all the love :grouphug:

    :11300: Yeaaaaahh lol What can I say brotha, never been too keen on censoring myself so I'll try not to let it happen again :) Thank u though for reading :grouphug:
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wanted to come Back and make my imput because I know I do not have ample time to take...but I wanted to say Whoa Sister Triniti. WHoa, Whoa, WHOA. You put real feeling in this,....it was deep sister....deep. Unhappy, yet still can't figure our what route it take to get out....because you can't figure out what route got you there in the first place. Flow on.....Flow on sis...You will get out!
     
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    triniti424:
    Feeling this piece strongly censored or uncensored.:)
    It makes its point crystal clear. I guess you know
    that if you knew how you got there you would have
    never went. Poetess you laid this wonderfully.


    Much Luv
     
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