Black Poetry : ...For Old Times Sake...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by triniti424, Sep 16, 2008.

  1. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So much I liked about this piece. You start off eloquently speaking of "island waterfalls", then dig in and give the brass knuckles feeling of loss:
    And finally emotively and simply state that you love and miss him. Good to read you again poetess.
     
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    WOW!

    There she is!

    BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!:terrific::terrific::terrific:

    That's what i've been waiting for!

    Excellent write Sister!:bowdown::bowdown::bowdown::SuN043:

    :heart:
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love this flo Triniti

    Oh no.. not a I-5 wreak...
    There is so much.. that could be said

    You shared how no one.. and with emphasis on " pretend "

    " No sermon, no words, no man, no..thing...
    nothing can make me “pretend”

    That I’m okay "

    You gave me some great advise recently
    You said the strong keep going.
    When gripped in this way
    Survivors.. find a way to survive



    It gets a little easier.
    It never goes away.

    So dance.

    Memories
    Can get in the way
    Cloud the focus

    Something a song or a place
    Triggers and...
    They kick open the closet
    It is OK to dance
    With the skeletons


    Dance with the memories and
    Put them away
    When it isn’t convenient
     
  5. info-moetry

    info-moetry STAFF STAFF

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    absolutely beautiful sis..........made me feel warm inside and had me looking around to see who I could cuddle up with!

    Just like your scribe, I miss reading you
     
  6. LovesDestiny

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    Wow! mixed with a little Fabulous! topped with a sprinkle of Genius!

    THIS piece....I didn't know whether to cry or clap or both!

    I just....miss you!!!!

    Excellent! Excellent! Excellent! Excellent! EXCELLENT!!!!!
     
  7. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awesome piece sis...all I can say is ...WOW!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    now u go gurl ....this was off da chain fo real .....missing and loving all in one
     
  9. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yea the pile-up caught the eye too

    but overall

    i'm not mad at cha

    trying to establish yours





    again:blowkiss:
     
  10. Khasm13

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    "now...I’m a 5-car-pile-up-on-I-5-no-way-out-and-no-recuperation-no-regeneration...just a wreck"

    that conjures up an ill picture right there...one that i have seen first hand...

    "And the laughing-crying-fighting-talking-teasing-pleasing-sharing-caring is NOT something that I’ve easily forgot
    And I dont know if I choose to...
    Because if I do...
    I lose apart of you
    The part of me that will remain
    Is the part from which i have nothing to gain"


    this board missed ur poetic words sis...

    one love
    khasm
     
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