Black Poetry : Focused

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  1. chauntrice

    chauntrice New Member MEMBER

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    Yall this is my first poem so tell me what you think Thanks


    Focused

    I stay Focused
    Do what I wanna do. To myself I remain true.
    Brush off all the haters. They'll get thiers later.
    Don't worry bout the lies. The truth comes to the wise.
    I stay Focused
    Only believe in myself. Look for no one elses help.
    Cuz I fall, crawl, rise above it all
    on my own.
    All the fake friends and backstabbers; their covers have been blown.
    Still I stay Focused
    Watch my back so no on can attack
    my strong will and ability to heal.
    Keep track of any one who lacks
    the gift to stay true
    whose personalities don't bloom.
    Move forward to discover
    what the world had to offer
    a strong willed, skilled, ready for thrill,
    beautiful, cultured, blossomed, never revealed
    what it is about the life that I live
    that keeps me shining and never stops smiling
    Cuz I'm Focused
    Tune out the haters
    Ignore the whiners
    Look striaght ahead
    Believe in myself instead
    of looking for help in everyone else
    While I'm doning all this still I remain
    Focused
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace & respect
    welcome to the family of love and caring

    this was very very nice , your gift shine through this piece
    i look to read more of u soon welcome within ..................
     
  3. Tantrum

    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome To the Poetic Haven
    I love this piece very well written
    I hope to see more from you
    Much Love Poet
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Difficult as it may be,we must keep our eyes on the prize regardless of the naysayers. On point piece,welcome to Destees, make yourself at home.
     
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    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think it's outstanding..........Keep on posting......will be on the lookout for your work

    :glasses:
     
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