Black Poetry : ...focus...

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  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    just let me close my eyes for a moment...
    so that i can focus on you like i should

    that wall that you've built is blinding me with it's sharp jagged edges jutting out...a glass menagerie of which i've read but have yet to understand

    let me seal my lids for one minute...
    my imaginations view offers a vision of

    blue skies spied from within those walls and wildflowers that bloom in the center of your mall...music sounds from an unseen place and i'm enveloped in it's grace
    and
    charming you are as you emerge from the shadows where your private vines climb...sheltered within fig trees and encrusted diamond swings used as a distraction for all possible negative factions

    will you share your thoughts
    explain that smile to me?

    i care not of my begging in this state
    it's demanded

    on bended knee i plead once again...

    please share with me....
     
  2. Bishop

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    I share with you
    all that is me
    my mind body soul eternally
    let us be one
    the past is done
    new chapters begun
    take all of me
    reign where you should be
    By my side
    till the end of time
    focus on me
    that the two of us
    can truly become we
     
  3. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poetess LiLi,

    You are HEAVY with this. Simply beautiful! Very glad to read you. Love the imagery.
     
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    this is sooo serene queen, as though you were beside me in the garden.... :cool:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sharing my comfort zone
    when ya heart feels alone
    given u da passion
    of sweet caresses
    holding u close
    whispering in sweet tune
    from da bedroom

    i'll share my heart
    my love's that's strong
    here wit me ya never wrong
    give u respect
    and always correct
    as we take hands from two ta one
    under our solo sun
    me & u
    from 2
    now 1
    in da flyte of dis night.....
     
  6. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hello my lovely poets!! thank you sincerely!!

    Bishop & $$RICH$$~i love your responses to this! now if i can only get that emotion from a gentleman FOR REAL (not sayin that your's isn't-ya know what i mean) i'd feel like a princess!! LOL
     
  7. elayne.

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    lili.


    i have to agree with all the fam before me...

    i love visuals & you have applied them in
    abundance!! i love serene & you've given me
    that as well. :) i was diggin' this... cause
    there is nothin' like the feeling when that
    special person allows you to see their soul...
    unrestricted... unfiltered... no barriers... for
    the first time. mmm mmm mmm :D
    (thanks for sharing)

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
  8. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ms elayne.~ thank you so very much for your eloquence! thanks for reading this and your kind words!!
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A Way of seeing

    When we close our eyes we often see things much clearer--you have reminded me of that--the focus of this piece was right on target--well done--Amun-Ra

    :toast:
     
  10. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Amun-Ra~god i feel like i should genuflect in your presence..lol...thanks so very much for checkin this out and your response...it's truly appreciated!:)
     
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